08-01-15

quick something

The smell of her kiss just left my lips,

I can't be stressed with her,

As soon as were apart,

I obsess for her,

Author's Note

I have never smoked a cigarette but tried to compare it to this feeling. Just tried to capture the feeling of wanting to be with a girl even though I had just left her house. She is my addiction.

Reviews

[Gabby Nieves]

damn, i feel this one so hard. Short but says so much more and reading this gave me a pain in my chest because I know that feeling oh so well. It's beautiful really, and amazing.. but strangly painful..? To want and yearn for another human like that. haha It's sick, don't you just love it? Awesome little piece.

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thanks a lot, I appreciate it!!! :)

[Cladine]

pretty romantic and flattering for a girl. :) Great write :)

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thank you!! :)

[Jane Taylor Hardy]

A romantic soft yet deeply psychological write....nicely inked.

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thanks!! :)

[Ali M.]

beautifully written. earth shattering events can be caused by such simple things and this showcases that very well! i also love your puncuation choice, it speaks just as loudly as the words.

[StimulateyourCreativity]

thank you so much!!

[Edis Radoncic]

I really thought for a split second that this was a haiku until I saw there was a fourth line to the poem haha. I really like the poem. Human connection is really powerful even if it is just a kiss.

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thank you!!!

[TheOne&Only]

I think you captured the feeling that you wanted perfectly through this write. I loved it.

[StimulateyourCreativity]

I really appreciate it, thanks!!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Brevity at its best.
Liked how with so less words the condition of the poet was aptly delivered.
And yes an addiction for cigarette taken as an inspiration for obsession, worked well.
Great write!

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thank you so much!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome.

[sinNsincerity]

"do you think about me every now and then...cause I'm coming home again."
This reminded me of Kanye 's Home coming song!
The opening line is killer bro!
Fix were to we're and it'll be perfect.
I know the feeling of being around a special women whom I'm recently addicted to, but don't know how to tell her without f*****g it all up...

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Right?! haha thanks thats my song, appreciate it brotha!!