I loved you

This is one of my first poems about a best friend I lost.

I love you, 

I couldn't see life without you,

So insane thinking we were once inseparable,

"Boring days" weren't so boring with you,

No worry at all about what the future could do to us,

How did this happen,

How could the universe do this to us,

I'm fed up acting like were friends,

So please don't pretend,

I've lost the old you, I'll never see him again,

When your handing over the cash don't you ever think of the past?

Forget it, I know one day it'll pass, 

But how often will you do this to yourself,

Bad wealth and worse health, 

I did what I could to stop it,

And you always said you were stopping,

It's hard to make a dog quit begging,

So for us, please just stop using,

I'm done feeling that I'm at fault,

I've done what I've could and you don't appreciate it at all

Who would've thought that addiction would keep us apart

Author's Note

Any input is appreciated

Reviews

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

What i truly respected and dug about this piece of work was how honest it is. You didn't follow any rules and demands your full attention. There are lots of poetry about addiction, and many that try to sum it up with in the parameters of what word rhymes with what work and that limits ( in my experience) the true scope of the subject. This authentic and fresh and has an almost urban kick to it. Good Job

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thank you! I definitely feel like if I want to express myself I can't follow the true rules cause it doesn't make it as authentic. I appreciate it!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Very nice wordplay.
I interpreted it as:
The friends were seperated because of one being addicted... The heartfelt words were blant and affectionate at the sametime. The delima as an undertone, of deciding who was at fault, did wonders. I loved the way you wrote the first line and cut it.
The lines I liked best are,
"So please don't pretend,
I've lost the old you, I'll never see him again."
I enjoyed it..
-Jyoti

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thank you!!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome!

[Kajal Sharma]

Its amazing how pure feelings take the form of words...

[StimulateyourCreativity]

It is hard to write what I feel but I try my best, thanks

[Shweta Shah]

Awesome read!
You have managed to pen down the exact feelings, one would feel in the transition.
I liked the remarks you made(Don't pretend),the questions you asked(How did it happen?,How could the universe do this to us,etc) and my favorite I'm done feeling I'm at fault.While losing a friend,we often feel we must be wrong and tend to cut them some slack;we do everything in our hands to get the relationship carry on!
The message is also conveyed nicely,that how addiction ruins friendship and turns a person into someone,we have never known!

Although i would like to make some suggestions,if i may...! I may be wrong,so,apologies in advance,if you disagree.

"like were friends" --- like we're friends

"When your handing over the cash don't you think of the past?"---when you're handing over the cash,don't you think of the past?

"Bad wealth"---In bad wealth and worse health.

"I've done what I've could"---" I've done what I could've.


And some question marks and commas here and there!
Though,this is what i feel!

Summing up...
Nice penmanship and portrayal!

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thanks I really appreciate it!!

[TheOne&Only]

A sad write, and emotionally hard poem to read for me. It hits close to home I must say. But hopefully I wont lose any more people to Addiction. Thanks for sharing. However hard to read, I enjoyed it.

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thanks, stay strong its the best thing you can do

[AaronFreitas]

A very deep write my friend... I enjoyed it. Addiction is a b***h... nothing worse to losing someone to addiction because they trade their best friends and loved ones for the addiction and can't break it. Good work :)

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thank you!!

[sinNsincerity]

Crazy write , but heartfelt to the fullest. Great wite!

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thank you, more to the story to be shared.

[sinNsincerity]

Yup, I cant wait to read some more.

[jeannemarie coulter]

well penned and easy to follow...there are a couple of typos...I'm fed up acting like were friends, in the line preceding you need the apostrophe between the e and the r in were...and in the next to last line you need to say I've done what I could...given the quality of the remaining poem, i am sure these were just typos...thank you...









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[StimulateyourCreativity]

Appreciate it!

[wordman]

you did a great job,believable life story

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thank you!

[wordman]

you`re welcome