Move on

MEEK AND WEAK, THAT’S WHAT YOU ARE

ON THE VERGE OF CRYING EVERY NIGHT

VAIN ARE YOUR DREAMS AND DECEITFUL YOUR HOPES

ENTRUSTING YOUR HEART TO OTHERS IS YOUR BIGGEST FLAW

 

OH, WHEN WILL YOU LEARN? WHEN WILL YOU CHANGE?

NAÏVE, FOOL, JUST STOP LYING TO YOURSELF

 

          DREAMING ALL THE TIME ABOUT THINGS YOU CANNOT HAVE

                    YOU KNOW IT’S IN VAIN BUT KEEP TRYING SO HARD

  DELUDING YOURSELF IS ONLY GOING TO GIVE YOU SCARS

 

         HOLDING ON AND TYING YOURSELF TO MERE FANTASIES

       THAT BRING A HAPPINESS AS EPHEMERAL AS THE BREEZE

           LISTENING TO YOUR EMOTIONS AND FEELINGS, BURYING REASON

                  WHICH ONLY LEAVES YOU DROWNING IN SORROW AND MISERY

 

WATCHING YOUR BROKEN HEART TURN TO DUST

FEELING LONELY AND HOPELESS, HAVING NOWHERE TO GO

 

SEEKING FOR SOMEONE TO LIFT YOU UP WHEN YOU’RE FRAIL

LETTING THE WORLD DEVOUR YOU IN EXCHANGE OF FALSE LOVE

ALL YOU MANAGE TO DO IS GETTING YOURSELF HURT

 

YOU CAN’T CONTROL THINGS, THEREFORE, STOP FIGHTING

THERE’S ONLY ONE THING LEFT TO DO

Reviews

[That Guy]

Very moving poem... So sad, your heart is heavy with love retaining
so much emotions in you, giving so much of yourself and trusting love and friendships but something is somehow missing, you give and you give and it hurst when circumstaces divide your heart from what should be? ACROSTIC, wonderfuly set up!
You did a woderful job! I did'nt even know it what was called acrostic poetry but thanks to Barleygirl I know what's it called. Great work!!!

[Sweet]

Thanks so much for the kind words. Relationships are complicated, and sometimes we make it worse by holding on to things we shouldn't. Moving on is difficult but sometimes it's the only option.

[Asfa Sheikh]

Wow! It's an amazing piece of work I read just now. You are one awesome writer with a raw talent. Always be your awesome self like this...

[Sweet]

I love your picture ^_^ yay, Minions !!!
Thank you for the compliments, it makes me very happy that your enjoyed my writing.

[Elmarie]

My Sweet

A well crafted poem and I alleyways love the variation in type to express emotion. skillful little wordsmith you are. There is also a beautiful message here withing this poem for me and what I got was to listen to my inside voice and love oneself don't give the power to someone else, Keep your own identity, that governs your destiny. So lovely and inspiring. But behind this great poem is a voice of authority and protection that I like, It must be the Mama in me.

Blessings El

[Sweet]

Thank you very much for the kind words Elmarie. I'm happy that you liked my poem and that it brought a positive message to you.
I can picture what you mean by "voice of authority". Whenever I re-read it, I always feel this "tone" of anger, authority, and exasperation... Trying to make us snap out of our reverie and come back to reality. Trying to deliver a message so hard and painful to accept.

Take care ^_^
Sweet

[Elmarie]

Brilliant. Keep up the good work a lot of healing needed. :) El

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Artistic writing here! I like how you ended it all with, "There's only one thing left to do." It left a question in my mind, but at the same time the answer was clear, MOVE ON IT'S TIME TO LET GO. Amazing write Sweet.

[Sweet]

Thank you Cyprian, I'm glad you liked it. I know what you mean. "There's only one thing left to do. can leave us wondering about what we're supposed to do, what can we do; since we can't control the situation and fighting it is in vain. Move on... not always what we want, but sometimes it's what we really need.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You're most welcome! Your last sentence to your last comment here is so profound. Truth!

[Inject Positivity]

Priceless!!!

The message is very important in in this write... Holding on to things which will never satisfy us or give us only pain and disappointment is the reason of our constant heartbreak in life... But moving is hard, it takes a lot of courage to do that, we learn from constant rejection and some of us move little faster and some of us late... But we must move on, otherwise the painful painful drama will never end... We all deserve something good in life and should learn to move on when things don't work...

A very strong yet inspiring write, a reminder to those who still decide whether to move on or stay in the same way...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Sweet]

Hello Dhiman. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. I agree with you. It's really hard to let go sometimes, and very painful, but it can be even more painful to hold on to lies. We just need to be strong and focus on the truth, on the bright side... but that's easier said than done.

See you around ^_^
Sweet

[AliciaB]

Wow! This poem is amazing! First of all, the way the red words are structured, going vertically and from left to right like that, is unique and very cool. I am impressed by the way you managed to fit the letters in so well where they needed to go. And secondly, the black words, the ones making up most of the poem, are also highly impressive. A lot of times, with acrostic-style poems like these, people end up putting in "fluff" that doesn't add much depth or meaning to the piece just because they need something that starts with a certain letter. But in this poem, each line delivers a powerful punch of emotion, playing on a different facet of the pain of this experience. I was looking for my favorite lines, but I honestly think that each line of this poem is fantastic, and I would just end up quoting the whole thing! Excellent work. This is truly impressive.

[Sweet]

Thank you so much for reading my poem and sharing your thoughts.
It makes me happy that you enjoyed it and your kind words motivate me to keep working hard ^_^

[AliciaB]

Yay! That's why I do it! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Very nice of use of words and thoughts. I agree with your description. Sometime we must let the old places and sadness behind us and move on. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Sweet]

Thank you ^_^ I'm glad you liked it.

[Coyote Poetry]

I did and you are welcome.

[TheRaven]

In the technical sense, I can't say this is the most original or memorable depiction of the feeling of a broken heart and a naive hope for a false loving relationship to continue. That sense of loving the idea of togetherness rather than what is actually there. It can be blinding, when really you have to open your eyes and see the truth and with the truth you can let go and move on. You've certainly established relatable emotions, and for me you captured the feeling of a blind love; a false love. Choosing a poor relationship over the feeling of loneliness, but it's only when we can let go and live alone with a smile on our face that we can be happy and ready for something real.

[Sweet]

I absolutely love this review.
Your words are wise and describe the poem very well (they remind me of when I took philosophy classes).
I like the way you perceive things, how you think deeply.
Thank you ^_^

[Lost, n'MT]

This is one of the most creative poems I ever read... as impressive as it is written, it's painfully accurate in capturing the pain... and it has such a heart-aching description and a much needed message. I really needed to read this... thank you writing this and thank you for the friend request...

[Sweet]

Thank you for accepting the request and for your kind words. It makes me really happy that you captured the essence of this poem. See you around ^_^ I look forwards reading your poems.

[Lost, n'MT]

You're welcome, it was extremely creative with a heartfelt and powerful message. I look forward to reading more your poems as well.

[anupriya]

very good poem and unique

[Sweet]

Thank you, I really appreciate it.

[anupriya]

welcome you were great

[Tamika]

This is incredible!! I love the message that it holds. Such an excellent idea to do it using the words "move on/its time/to let go"
The way it is written is unique, and really smart. Such an excellent poem! So full of meaning. Well done.

[Sweet]

Thank you very much Tamika. Your kind words motivate me to keep working hard and improve my writing ^_^