Move on

MEEK AND WEAK, THAT’S WHAT YOU ARE

ON THE VERGE OF CRYING EVERY NIGHT

VAIN ARE YOUR DREAMS AND DECEITFUL YOUR HOPES

ENTRUSTING YOUR HEART TO OTHERS IS YOUR BIGGEST FLAW

 

OH, WHEN WILL YOU LEARN? WHEN WILL YOU CHANGE?

NAÏVE, FOOL, JUST STOP LYING TO YOURSELF

 

          DREAMING ALL THE TIME ABOUT THINGS YOU CANNOT HAVE

                    YOU KNOW IT’S IN VAIN BUT KEEP TRYING SO HARD

  DELUDING YOURSELF IS ONLY GOING TO GIVE YOU SCARS

 

         HOLDING ON AND TYING YOURSELF TO MERE FANTASIES

       THAT BRING A HAPPINESS AS EPHEMERAL AS THE BREEZE

           LISTENING TO YOUR EMOTIONS AND FEELINGS, BURYING REASON

                  WHICH ONLY LEAVES YOU DROWNING IN SORROW AND MISERY

 

WATCHING YOUR BROKEN HEART TURN TO DUST

FEELING LONELY AND HOPELESS, HAVING NOWHERE TO GO

 

SEEKING FOR SOMEONE TO LIFT YOU UP WHEN YOU’RE FRAIL

LETTING THE WORLD DEVOUR YOU IN EXCHANGE OF FALSE LOVE

ALL YOU MANAGE TO DO IS GETTING YOURSELF HURT

 

YOU CAN’T CONTROL THINGS, THEREFORE, STOP FIGHTING

THERE’S ONLY ONE THING LEFT TO DO

Reviews

[That Guy]

Very moving poem... So sad, your heart is heavy with love retaining
so much emotions in you, giving so much of yourself and trusting love and friendships but something is somehow missing, you give and you give and it hurst when circumstaces divide your heart from what should be? ACROSTIC, wonderfuly set up!
You did a woderful job! I did'nt even know it what was called acrostic poetry but thanks to Barleygirl I know what's it called. Great work!!!

[Sweet]

Thanks so much for the kind words. Relationships are complicated, and sometimes we make it worse by holding on to things we shouldn't. Moving on is difficult but sometimes it's the only option.

[Michael (Letters and Li..]

Wow! This is amazing. So blunt, but really relatable and moving at the same time. I love the creative style behind it with spelling out the words in a vertical fashion. It's really cool. I admire this poem!

[Sweet]

Thank you very much for taking the time to share your thoughts about my poem, I really appreciate it. Happy you enjoyed it ^_^

[YanZeros]

THERE’S ONLY ONE THING LEFT TO DO. MOVE ON ITS TIME TO LET GO! ~ This so amazes me very well penned Sweet! sending you good vibes!

[Sweet]

Thank you for your kind words. Keep sending good vibes, always need them! =D

[YanZeros]

you're welcome! :) xD

[louise]

How very true. The title attracted me to it and it doesn't disappoint. Very wise words and such a clever message you have highlighted in it.

[Sweet]

Thank you for sharing your thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem ^_^

[zaisham9393]

Awesome ...I loved it so much.Very creative and very well written.I love acrostic poems and this was very well put together!!

[Sweet]

Thank you for reading my poem ^_^ I'm happy you liked it.

[Mysticorn]

I can only imagine the thought and time it took you to construct this poem. I am thoroughly impressed. I also am intrigued by how the poem is written in such a way that the reader is left to wonder if the narrator is referring to themself as the "you" in the poem, or is the narrator directing this to someone else who is suffering from unrequited love? Very enjoyable poem!

[Sweet]

Hello ^_^ Thank you for sharing your thoughts. The poem was written directed to oneself. Someone struggling with their feelings and thoughts. Glad you enjoyed it.

[Teja]

Moving on, is one of the hardest thing. You have written this poem in acrostic , well crafted with words. The poem is nice. Good one.

[Sweet]

Thank you, I'm glad you liked it.

[barleygirl]

I really enjoy doing acrostic poems, but this one takes things a couple steps further. I like the phrase you highlight in red, which goes well with your message. Mostly your lines read swiftly but in a few places, you pile on a few too many adjectives/adverbs and this slows down these few lines. It's hard, but sometimes we have to let go of a few well-chosen words, here & there, for the sake of even pacing thru-out. I like the idea of talking to oneself, which is apparent right off in reading this. Trying different points of view are always interesting.

[Sweet]

Thank you very much for reviewing my poem and for your helpful comments.
I like acrostics too ^_^ a message within a message, they can be pretty interesting.
I'm pleased that you could tell the idea of talking to oneself. I wanted to portray that inner battle/struggle of wanting to hold on but having to let go.
I'll definitely pay more attention to the pace and how it reads.
For my last poem I tried to read it out loud and I realized that, that helped me make some modifications to improve the flow.
Thanks again Barley :)

[𝐋.𝐂.]

Amazing...!!
You put all letters into the poem ,moreover,
seperate them to "beginning, middle, end" of each line for
different stanzas.

[Sweet]

Thank you very much ^_^