So Happy Your Gone

I wrote this while dealing with what I though at the time was the worst heart ache I have expirienced over anyone!

With all emotions running a flow

Making all the tears and movements slow

All the pain on lockdown, makes our  reality truly so broken

The words spoken with an evil tongue is just the emotion of a small token

Watching my soul bleed onto the cold slate

Is my reality truly our fate

Standing so alone, almost like time standing still

Waking up everyday and swallowing life with a pill

Deep down knowing that life was nothing but a lie

Spending every chance trying to get oh so high

Reality is driving my soul insane

Praying to God, to release you and I of all this pain

Reviews

[kurrupted]

I can feel the emotions as it flows from the writer to the page, albiet sad, i can sense it as i very well relate to this situation.....thanks for sharing and PLEASE DONT BOUND YOURSELF TOO MUCH TO THE PAST ESPECIALLY IN A SITUATION LIKE THIS....I KNOW IT HARD CUZ IT HAS THIS HAUNTIN TENDENCIES, BUT THERE IS A WAY OUT AND THIS IS JUST ONE OF IT...letting it out and your friends commenting on it.

[Crazy Cat Man]

Spending every chance trying to get oh so high

whewwwwwww getting high and drunk really only numbs the pain....its better to face it head on.....situations always improve..its never the end...great write :D

[James Takeo Panton]

Sometimes, you just want it to be over.....very honest and heart-felt, and an excellent write!

[Joseph - Michael]

I can seriously related to every one of the words you've described there. Look at the bright side, you don't have to worry about dealing with that person anymore. I mean, I've gotten over all of the heartaches I went through, except just one, because she got my son. You don't have anything that will be shared with anyone like that, so you'll be alright...

Anyway, it's all still good tho and thank you for being brave enough to share this...

[Vonnette]

I feel your sadness in the poem. Reality in the midst of pain is overwhelming. I can identify this and think it a nice piece.

[Mysteral - Night Prowle..]

I think this piece is wonderful. The emotion and pain runs very deeply through the entire poem. Every heartache seems to be the worst we have experienced, just like the next one will. That at the time we want it to end, hope it will be the last we ever feel. Very well written and thanks for giving me the opportunity to read and review.

Just one small point, see attached note...