my biggest fear is writing

my biggest fear is writing

writing him letters that he’ll never read

letters that won’t be enough to fill the void

the space between us will tick

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like chinese water torture

if only i could build a bucket out of my words

to catch the water, pause it’s rhythm 

If only I could hold him with my metaphors and imagery

build myself out of my words

build a home for him in the delicate sheets 

a warm blanket on a cold winter night

a heartbeat to rest his tired head upon

a soft hand to hold when things get rough

my biggest fear is writing 

writing him letters that he’ll stop reading

writing letters that won’t be enough

Reviews

[N]

Another great one. I'll definitely be reading more of yours. :)

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

This is very heartfelt and amazing. Here's hoping the speaker finds the courage to write the letters, and that he loves her enough to read the entire things, return her affection and love and cherish her forever!

[wunder]

~"a warm blanket on a cold winter night
a heartbeat to rest his tired head upon
a soft hand to hold when things get rough"~i love!~
~i love the way you turn this poem around
to mean so much...very Beautiful!~ :)

[Clockwork]

I like how you take the title on this one and build it into the overall theme of this one. I must admit that I wasn't expecting the direction you took, but I like what you did here. These are my favorite lines: like Chinese water torture/if only i could build a bucket out of my words/to catch the water, pause it’s rhythm." I like the simile and metaphor that you use in those lines. They really describe the torturous nature of that doubt, and the care that you feel in the hopes that your words will be enough. Thank you for sharing this with me.

[Melanie Genevieve]

Thanks! & Thank YOU for stopping by! :D

[Robert Lindsay]

If it's long distance separation then yes it's torture...
even more so if there's a fear it will fall apart from one side.
Space and time apart can create its own inevitable sense of unreality and frustration but the biggest test is if the reunions become less dynamic and celebratory.
Just a thought, the Chinese torture 'tick' could be ''drip' or even
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[Melanie Genevieve]

hmmmmmm that's a pretty cool idea too :D

[Dutch Jr.]

Building comfort with our words. If only our words could create some of the things we promise in our writing.

Either way, a very nice use of words in this one. But always remember distance makes the heart grow fonder. The way you characterized time of being distanced as Chinese water torture was pretty clever. I liked this one.

[Melanie Genevieve]

Thanks!! :D

[buffalosoldier96]

loved the emotion in this really felt him. like the line that said. "If only I could hold him with my metaphors and imagery" really very interesting to think about. only thing i would say is what do you mean by chinese water torture.

[Melanie Genevieve]

Thank you! Chinese water torture is when a victim is strapped down and single drops of water slowly drip at a steady pace on their head. It's a supposed to drive the victim insane over a long period of time just like the distance between us will drive me more and more insane over a long period of time. Also, what the reader doesn't know is the man I had in mind while writing this poem is Chinese :P lol

[Rita L. Sev]

The emotion and apprehension come through perfectly in this piece - great imagery; the flow works well here. Long distance relationships rely on letters, and even when all are read and answered, there is a longing... Well done!

[Melanie Genevieve]

Thanks :D & thank you so much for stopping by!

[Ansel Reid]

What do you think his biggest fear is?

[shallimarRose]

I really felt this...Not quite sure if it is meant as it but I felt it was about an overseas relationship.. Perhaps a soldier..
"my biggest fear is writing
writing him letters that he’ll stop reading
writing letters that won’t be enough."

Yes, when is it that the letters and messages become mundane and he needs more?
I loved the theme and the longing felt as I read between the lines.. great share Melanie thank you..
shallimarRose

[Melanie Genevieve]

You are spot on, this is meant for a soldier. Thank you! & Thanks so much for stopping by! I really appreciate it!

[shallimarRose]

You're welcome Mel.. xo