Closely Distant

I live a life that's wild and free
No ones gonna tell me how to be me
Especially when you were never there
Its a little to late to act like you care

You just sit there on your throne
Judging me while im all alone
Its not my fault you ran away
So you cant be mad i chose to stay

You don't care about my fears
My cries are falling on deaf ears
Your never gonna see my tears
Why would that change after all these years

I know ill never be worth your time
So you can sit in the dark
while i let my soul shine
You've got reservations
hope you got a good seat
to watch me live my life
looking up from beneath.....

Reviews

[Shogun]

Hey there, SweeTLoU,

I see you've taken my advice and worked on your punctuation errors and 'Caps'-ing the first letters in the first words in every stanza. I really like this one, short, but its something to contemplate about. I can feel the defiance in those words, and my favorite part was the final stanza. Great job on that one. I must say that your ability to post poems almost daily is rather impressive, for I, admittedly, cannot sustain such a feat before rolling on the floor and crying uncle.

Definitely keeping an eye for your future prose,
Shogun

[SweeTLoU]

thanks bud i appreciate it this one has alot of meaning to me, and yea i usually write something most days mostly at night when i cant sleep haha