The Outcast

when you feel like your cast aside and unworthy even with those you love most....

i may be wrong

but you aren't right
did you put out your hand
hoping i would bite
this whole situation
just doesn't make sense
why does every conversation
have to feel so tense
i think about the time when
i thought that we were friends
was that ever even real
or was it all pretend

yeah its alright
yeah its okay
just dont be surprised
when i walk away
all i know is ill be fine
living my life because its mine

i know ill never fit
in your perfect little plan
but theres still so many things
that i just dont understand
you never got to know me
so to you i just seem strange
it will always be my fault
thats never gonna change

yeah its alright
yeah its okay
just dont be surprised
when i walk away
all i know is ill be fine
living my life because its mine

i can take the pain
so let it rain
wash it all away
so i can change
im sick of everyday
just feeling the same
maybe your right
maybe im to blame
i know i cant take back
what ive done in the past
but why do you have to make me feel
like im nothing but the outcast

Reviews

[Shogun]

Hey there, SweeTLoU,

I personally enjoy a good, depressing, rhyming poem so i'll try to be as fair as possible. I'd like to say you did a good job on making the poem as smooth as possible and really, the words just click. It reminds me of the REO Speedwagon song, 'That ain't love to some degree, and really, you did a fantastic job in writing this beautiful poem and really, I'd like to read more of your future prose. However, me being, well, shogun, have an eye for detail. I dont mean ill but the little things like the Caps in letters can be a put off for me.

Overall, its a really good poem, the words clicking in all the right places and emotions are just leaking from the stanzas and its really hard not to stare and read.