Thoughts

My first non-rhyming poem.

Lying on my bed, i can stare at the ceiling for hours
The mixture of cream and white paint, like my mixed emotions
Sounds all around me, but none can pierce my isolated bubble
Im zoned out, in thought, just thinking life through.
Im dedicated, i know that, my determination
always make me persevere and come out almost the best
but im not the best, i just never give up

I get knocked down, by life, a dead body on the floor
has sometimes been livelier than me.
But..
I get up. i never stay down.
I get through life, working for each hard-earned breath
I appreciate all around me, especially
The light breeze that cools me, or
The sunlight, on my shoulders, which warms me up
I never take anything for granted, I always
Know how important each little seperate thing is
Like a chain reaction

I do something good, three good things happen to me
I do something bad, bad things happen to people around me
They all put weight on my shoulders though, it pushes me to the ground
But i get up. I never stay down.
I never get opportunities, I make my own, but
after making my own, people regret not giving me the chance
Because I did it all myself, i don't owe anyone s**t.
They cant hold it against me.

Im proud, of who i am; the way i've turned out.
Thanks to my life's journey, and my dad's loving hand, and mistakes.
Im not the best, but im far from bad, i am
who I am
and many people say im perfect the way i am
the way i've turned out
but here i am...
im still alone.

Reviews

[Lina]

You create some lovely imagery and make your words relatable even though its made out to be about your isolation. It's like you invite people to be alone with you, and it's lonesome party that everyone wants to and will be a part of! I often enjoy non-rhyming poems more than the rhyming ones... so keep on with non-rhymes!

[L]

I like this poem. It's open and positive and easy to relate to. When it comes to non-rhyming poems it's not always easy to stick to form and make it flow but you did it, well done.