a conversation on the last boat . . .

'What if one misses

the last boat?',

asked my friend.

'You will be sent

another one',

I replied

while waiting

for my fifth-last-boat.

,..

Reviews

[Frozen Eyes]

Strikingly curious.. did the wait end? did the boat come?? did u miss your boat?? r u still waiting?

[Namrata]

Ain't there more to this one ? I am breathless with anticipation.

[Wynter Page]

This almost leaves me hanging, ready to hear the next reply.
This poem seems almost dark and morbid, and insights impatience in me. Like there's a never-ending wait.
But then it's almost quaint and sarcastic, almost humorous.
This poem is like a chamelon, it blends into almost any opinion.
Great piece!

[Gurleen Saluja]

a nice write.. somewhere a touch of sarcasm or may be irony where still waiting for the fifth one

[priya]

I found the poem too cute (thats sounds kiddish) and the person too naive....

[Swaroop Manikandan]

:-) welcome back... thanks for the review...

[priya]

it feels so good to be here.... :)