rain shadow . . .

for her

I live in a far away dry-land

and you in the midst of the rain-forest.

We could still relate to each other.

I thus started weaving a carpet

to lay in the sphere in between

so as to make our transgressions

a comfortable affair.

I did of course weave the carpet with

facts and fiction

which you preferred to call truth and lies.

On your way to reach the middle-path

you admired those fictional threads

as shiny and smooth.

But when you are back in the rain

you are telling me that

I should have not lied to you.

I have nothing to say in response,

just remember those little violet flowers

that have blossomed on both sides of the way

when you headed back.

,..

Reviews

[WritersRankings]

Your style has a lot of potential! More so than most, perhaps even the most of all the Indian poets currently active on here. Your cadence is musical and very light.

[Swaroop Manikandan]

That is indeed very encouraging... Thanks a lot for the review...

[Ayushi]

I can see your grief Swaroop. It is actually the fantasy and fiction that attract people but during hard times they do nothing but blame them.
I liked your expressing power and writing skills :)

[Swaroop Manikandan]

Thanks Ayushi for the review... The expression indeed is from the intensity of one's experience...read moreThanks Ayushi for the review... The expression indeed is from the intensity of one's experience...

[Namrata]

Favorite part : facts and fiction...which you preferred to call truth and lies. A wonderful co-relation.
And it is pretty obvious how you see what she doesn't and how she sees what you don't think of.

[Swaroop Manikandan]

it was an important phase to come beyond...

[Namrata]

Yes for sure.

[audrie]

There are many reasons that one may lie. . . not wanting to hurt someone's feelings, fear of rejection, pride, afraid of loss and many more reasons. This reminds me of a desire to keep true love intact even with great distance but simply not being able to live up to the challenge.

[Swaroop Manikandan]

its great to see how you derive your perceptions...

[Wynter Page]

ah irony in the finest sense, sadly this is very true most of the time.
beautifully written.

[Swaroop Manikandan]

thanks dear friend...

[Wynter Page]

You're very welcome

[Matching Socks]

lol. this makes me laugh out loud.
women are sometimes in love with the fiction, not the truth.
your words are spot on.
don't say what you MEAN, just tell me what i want to HEAR.
... and then the 'you LIED to me'

[Swaroop Manikandan]

:-) good that it doesn't happen that often

[Eve Ola]

just remember those little violet flowers
that have blossomed on both sides of the way... very nice very fine. well done

[Swaroop Manikandan]

thanks Eve... :-)

[priya]

A fact is a truth and fiction is a lie.

[priya]

This is what is realized from your poem. :)

[Swaroop Manikandan]

poem is like water... takes the shape of the container... if there is nothing to contain, it flows... so the meaning is yours as well as the realisation :-)

[Jane Dougherty]

Reminds me of the idea behind The Cloths of Heaven. Lovely ending.

[Swaroop Manikandan]

Thanks Jane for stopping by