Modus Operandi

to life unlived before you
collaspable, almost impossible
I sat there, cross-legged
undiscovered
but it's comforting
like the company you keep,
oily and overwhelming.
the mere act of making
a mark, a man, a monster
I've made my mistakes
a million times
we'll never be the same again
to life
I live like this
campaign of destruction
this beautiful distraction
over a dinner conversation
if our wounds are deeper
then my job is done
you tell me someday
your going to save me
but you're all soft scars
and sweet sweat
save yourself

Reviews

[PianoandPage]

i love your use of alliteration throughout. it added to the tone of the poem.

the meaning was a little lost on me. i absolutely loved your images like "oily and overwhelming". but at the end of the piece i wasn't sure what you were trying to convey.

i think you show a depth and complexity that many poets lack, the layers you put here definately capture my attention and give me the impressions of inner anger and conflict but without any context.

definitely makes me want to get into your other work though.

:)

[The Cougar's Den]

you tell me someday
your going to save me
but you're all soft scars
and sweet sweat
save yourself ---- Perfect!

Great write!

[The Cougar's Den]

you tell me someday
your going to save me
but you're all soft scars
and sweet sweat
save yourself ---- Perfect!

Great write!

[LJW]

What I like most about this is its conversational tone; like you could almost say this right to him.
Good title too, fits the message well.

[Pen Draggin']

This is very good. Your word usage is pretty impressive and the way the sounds of them play off of each other gives the piece a musical depth. The first this I noticed was the lack of capitalization but there are periods breaking up the piece. I think that more punctuation is the right thing to do, if you used even more of it this poem would really shine. Good work!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

What can I say woman, another poem that is full of intense emotion through your unique style... the piece is witty and gripping... two broken souls finding temporary comfort in one another.

campaign of destruction
this beautiful distraction
over a dinner conversation
if our wounds are deeper

What can I say but WOW!!

[An owl on the moon]

So powerfully expressive, moving with intense, vivid emotion and flowing so intricately, line-by-line: campaign of destruction, this beautiful distraction, over a dinner conversation... You paint with your words and it's amazing...