Do Not Enter

these one way streets that have no name-

leave me lost, feeling broken and ashamed

 

you never know a dead-end, til you've hit it straight on-

crawling vines, ragged sign, a broken gate- all alone

 

life becomes a maze, one you can't escape from

for whichever way you turn, backwards you run

 

til forward you find, a light through the mire,

you search you seek, the body weak, the mind so tired

 

its this feeling of sinking, sinking sand

in the middle of a busy street, no place to stand

 

a map would do, just about now,

but already too lost, how could I navigate, how?

 

its not something i can conquer, now's not my chance

to try and gain glory, when im lost within this trance

 

 through blinding darkness, i stumble and i slip

twasn't s'posed to end this way- such a short trip

 

but one misguided signal, leads a heart astray

a thought misled ends tonight, oh to once again see the day

 

dread and fear entangle the watchful eye goad,

for sights set upon the wrong direction, a one way road

 

but blessed be the Watch, who sees every lost soul,

whom He sets straight gains legs as a foal

 

stumbling to maturity, regaining strength each day,

now I watch, I wait, I see- He bids "this way"

 

no more shall i wander, these streets alone

to a clearing I see a Rock, a stone

 

it says upon it, come and rest

at this place you begin your test

 

follow me, wait on me, go nowhere idle

my sight put on, my Spirit bridle

 

for if you follow, my compass, my map

avoid you may not always, but set free from each trap

 

i am your road, your path, your Guide

never leave me love, stay at my side

Author's Note

Yes, there is sporadic punctuation, lack of capitalization- no this is not my norm.
To me, the lack of these in a writing is an inherent part of the feeling had when creating it.
So in my feelings of desperation when I wrote this, let that be just as indicative of feeling as the words themselves.

Reviews

[Penny]

Author's note is quite interesting. From time to time you just need to clarify how a certain technique made your writing what it is. Two things I loved about this poem, that subtle rhyme and the use of syncope. Also writing in syncope is quite a task but you nailed it. Loved the theme, also I felt it can be interpreted in many ways. Plus the ending, though I am quite an atheist, I can say it won my heart.

[Saruwa]

Thank you Penny. I'm quite sorry I am just now reading your review. This site doesn't always tell me when new comments come, you know? Your review is encouraging, and I am so glad to hear that though we have different views my words touched you. How beautiful that words can do that. Looking forward to reading some of your writing as well :)