Moon Bird

I dreamt I was a little bird
That taught myself to fly
My first attempt, I hit the ground,
But I didn’t cry

I shook if off and flapped my wings
Until I got it right
With nothing else to hold me back
I flew into the night

I realized that gravity
Had no hold on me
So I flew towards the moon
For Earth had set me free

It took a while to reach the moon
It’s pretty far from here
And from the moon I saw the Earth
So beautiful and clear

I told the moon, that I’d forgot
All my dreams at home
And that’s the only place that I know of
Where my heart can roam

“You better go, before you wake.”
Was the moons reply
“And little bird remember this�"
You taught yourself to fly.”

When I woke, I smiled at you
And whispered in your ear
“You should fly, to the moon
It’s not that far from here.”

Reviews

[Jo]

A lovely, fun tale promoting self belief. Enjoyable, thank you.

[John Preston]

Souls at night
Flight unseen
yes we dream

[Daydreamer]

HAHAHAHAH!!! It's so true when we think we are the ones capable of breaking away from our locked souls and wandering over for better visions and better feelings about life and dreams.... So cute!
I love this stanza so much,Suzan
## I the moon, that I’d forgot
All my dreams at home
And that’s the only place that I know of
Where my heart can roam

and also; as it shows we can chase dreams if we truly will
##When I woke, I smiled at you
And whispered in your ear
“You should fly, to the moon
It’s not that far from here

and your bravery and how it was appreciated;
##“You better go, before you wake.”
Was the moons reply
“And little bird remember this"
You taught yourself to fly.”

lovely poem..🌟🌟🌟🌟

[Matching Socks]

I really enjoyed this one too Susan.
(Always nice to see fellow Canucks too!)

[Neville]

A delightful read that put a smile on my face, I can tell you. All Good Things, N

[Lyn Anderson]

This is really quite wonderful and whimsical. I will read on ... welcome here, and just so you know, I am known a little for correcting, so if you have "correctophobia" let me know ...:)

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Wow so beautiful and elegant.

Thank you for your lovely review and comment.

Thank you for sharing this powerful piece.


I loved these stanza's lines.

I told the moon, that I’d forgot
All my dreams at home
And that’s the only place that I know of
Where my heart can roam

“You better go, before you wake.”
Was the moons reply
“And little bird remember this"
You taught yourself to fly.”

When I woke, I smiled at you
And whispered in your ear
“You should fly, to the moon
It’s not that far from here.”


Blessings. kindred poet

[John Anderson]

Hi Sue! Great to see you here!!! Rene is here too, and you see Chris has been here:-) Great piece

[Chris]

You set a soft cadence... there are a few pauses/stumbles where a syllable added or moved might smooth the tones. Reading it slowly and aloud will point to them.

As a note - Cut and pasting into the text boxes here will sometimes cause a dash to randomly be changed into a quotation mark AFTER you press Publish. I always check my post AFTER I post to be sure that glitch didn't bite me. If it does bite you a simple edit WILL resolve it.

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