For A Day...

Something eloquent in this breeze

Not magniloquence but a promise

And some divinity in its smile and 

Tales for life and death

Something peculiar with these nights

Where I can talk long stories

With a king companion who

Awards me some grace of happiness

Delighted not be one in this mankind

But residing in trees and longing for nights

Playing classics with ripples, loving this breeze

Which slowly makes my face

It's a pleasure that I came unto here

And stayed far, I know.

But it's that echoes and silence

In these forests is what makes 

My heart fight for my life,

A day more

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Wonderful use of words and thoughts. Some days, we can be enlighten. I liked the flow of thoughts leading to the strong ending. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Surya]

Thank you, John..:)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Anjali]

I liked the theme and the concept of it... The message it is sending is really beautiful! The choice of words is quite unique too.. I liked it

[Surya]

Thank you, Anjali....:)

[Anjali]

Mention not!

[Richard simpson]

Love the word choice in this. I can feel the emotion coming out of you driving your musing on the canvas. Great job at the description and nothing is wrong with it. Great job.

[Surya]

Thank you, Richard...:)

[Najam Us Saher]

The weather in Hyderabad prompted you to write this isn't it? 😀
I love the flow of words, they are as smooth as the breeze in your poem. The scenery you have created is very pleasing and one can easily feel that by your words.

[Surya]

I think you had me..:)
Your words pleased me as well, Thanks for those...:)

[Najam Us Saher]

It was my pleasure reading it. ☺

[barleygirl]

This is the best one of yours that I've read in the past year! I really love this one. It reminds me of my own simple existence in the wilderness, living alone in a rustic cabin, feeling "at one" with God. I love the way you flirt with the idea of God as a companion, yet not strongly enuf to turn away some reader who might have a different way of seeing (or not seeing) divinity. I love the way you describe the sensations of being out in nature, the breeze, the nights, the ripples . . . to me, the divine brushes us with soft caresses all the time & most people aren't paying attention (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Surya]

My job is done when you feel what I write. Or I'm not good at my work if you didn't feel so. Thank God, you felt it.
Thank you so much, Margie (((HUGS)))

[wordman]

man and nature,a secret love affair for eons..
being one with nature is spiritual

[Surya]

Haha...Might hold true...Thank you, Wordman..:)

[wordman]

you`re welcome

[Priyanshi]

The whole poem is so beautiful.....and the last stanza is more beautiful ....
Keep writing.:))

[Surya]

Thank you, Dear....:)