Divine Time...

Peevish smile in a tavern
Is worthless;
Wrecking pain in my heart
Is all that I care,
And worthy, it seems so

My life is a hell of happiness
But I live in heavens of pain
Just like a flower in a fire
And a smile in lunacy

This always ricochets in walls
Of my brain;
Sorrow always echoes it's smile
As tears

Nonetheless, it goes on just for
That day to come when
All this breaks on my lips
For a pleasureful smile at my past

Reviews

[Anjali]

"My life is a hell of happiness
But I live in heavens of pain "
I loved this... Like wow! I love the irony in the whole piece.. it's great!

[Surya]

Thank you so much...::))

[Anjali]

Mention not

[Ronaldo]

Nicely done! So succinct and precise. You've managed to capture the ambiguity that haunts, and also, maybe our only recourse... the moment we write about it.

[Surya]

For sure. Thank you, Ronaldo...:)

[Najam Us Saher]

Very deep and meaningful. You chose your words very carefully and they are different. I like that you are hopeful and that is reflected in this poem.

[Surya]

Do I?
Thank you Saher..:))

[Najam Us Saher]

You are most welcome. ☺

[Priyanshi]

Usually I try to find a line or two lines or sometimes even a stanza in many poems which I really love. But Surya your poems are unique....it's difficult to pick a line or a stanza....the whole is good.Every poem is beautiful in it's way.
:))

[Surya]

That's the best thing i've heard these days...:)
Thank you, Priyanshi...:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes keeping the pain inside while keeping the mask on the outside...
the pain builds up until it breaks us...
I love the way you used such great paradoxes especially in the second stanza...
in third stanza it should be "its smile"---

well done.

[Surya]

I'll edit it. Thank you, J...:)

[wordman]

sounds just like life in motion

[Surya]

It is. Thank you Wordman...::))

[wordman]

you`re welcome

[Coyote Poetry]

Life is a steady teacher my friend.
"This always ricochets in walls
Of my brain;
Sorrow always echoes it's smile
As tears"
Tears make us we knew love and we knew sorrow. Thank you Surya for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Surya]

Sure it does, thank you, John...::))

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Surya.

[barleygirl]

It’s always a good day when I find two new poems from YOU! Thanks for read-requesting me! I’m not sure what this poem is saying, but it reminds me of being bipolar (which I am – used to be called “manic depression”). I always like contrasts in a poem, becuz life is full of contrasts. It’s not realistic to describe love or life as being perfect. I especially love the super creative ways you find to set up so many contrasting lines thru-out your poem. Sometimes the various moods richochet in my brain, being bipolar – such a way to describe that feeling! This is really full of imagination based on real life feelings! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Surya]

It's about life. That's the best thing to hear. Thank you, Margie...::))