Breeze As A Spear...

Some where behind this

Breeze on this bruisy man

I feel your presence

Even in your delighted absence

Negligence of rain on me

Showered me my tears

Worth of drunken spears

Digged my love mines.

Tattered tauntrums

In echoes of silence

I found a gaze of your

Pleasant smiles on my lips.

Lurking eyes of you

Gumptioned my

Petals of love, making me

A bud to love you again.

Reviews

[Hope]

"I feel your presence
Even in your delighted absence"
This is what, for me, stood out in the poem. It holds so many feelings and contradictions.
And the entire poem has a unique style.
Though I didn't understand each word as you meant it, I still found this poem one of your bests.
Thanks for sharing Surya!

[Priyanshi]

Wow... a wonderful poem it is... each line is so so good.
very well written.

[Surya]

Thanqq so much Priyanshi...:)

[Priyanshi]

My pleasure.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really love the use of "gumption" as a verb...creative poem...no matter how abused we might be in a relationship...we can still miss it so much....
j.

[Surya]

Thank you J...:)

[Mr.Writer]

A descriptive, lovely, emotional and beautiful poem Surya! A refreshing one indeed!
I found myself smiling as well while reading this ;)
Well done, keep it up :))

[Surya]

Thank you Shaan.. :)

[Mr.Writer]

No problem :)

[Anjali]

Such wonderful and thoughtful poem this is! I absolutely adore it. Reading your poems feels like an illusion and dream, it's just so beautiful!

[Surya]

Haha, Thank you so much Anjali....:)

[Anjali]

You are very welcome!

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed these words and thoughts.
"Lurking eyes of you
Gumptioned my
Petals of love, making me
A bud to love you again."
I love the above lines. Honest and true they are. Thank you Surya for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Surya]

Thank you John...:)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.