Honest words and thoughts led reader to destine places and thoughts.
"Dead and found
Even I breathe now.
Not to utter but
No words, nothing in my mind."
The above lines stood to me. Thank you Surya for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
This is a most original way to word-paint the ideas of how a possibly inadequate-feeling person might feel. The title is a work of art in itself, & I loved the imagery thru-out your poem, but I kinda think it would be fun to add more "plumage" imagery to amplify this metaphor. There's nothing worse than a bird that's silent & can't fly. God help those who feel this way . . .
I kind of find it relatable a little bit, as it was hard for me to find a place for me to fit in, a thing that I could go after, and a purpose to achieve. It's beautiful. I liked it! Keep writing!
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Deep down you know something, just listen to it might be you feel happy...Thank you Anjali for your .. read moreDeep down you know something, just listen to it might be you feel happy...Thank you Anjali for your kind visit and words..:)
The words are just like feelings pouring, describes raw emptiness a person without purpose feels.
It's smartly structured to make right impact at the end! Good job✌️😊
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Sometimes, yes....Thank you kruthika for your kind visit and sharing your words,,,,am glad for them... read moreSometimes, yes....Thank you kruthika for your kind visit and sharing your words,,,,am glad for them...:)
good piece describing the speaker searching for a reason for being...something to strive for...a goal that he hasn't found yet...i really like this...do think you meant "Even I breathe now>"
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Yeah it's breathe, I will change it now...Thank you J.