Maahi...

Ye kya safar hai jisme hum na ho

Khaana-ba-doshiyon se koun kahe Qeemat aashna ki

mulaqaat na ho woh khoobsurat aafreen ki

Tanhaa sa mann hai kahi koh na jaaye us mulaqqat mein...

Ho toh gaya moutjza nazaqat mulaqaat mein

Koh gaye hum lihaaz apni raftaar ka...

Hum toh bane pasbaan apni qalb ka

jaha aapki aankhon ki ruhaniyaat ne diya saza..

Pia keliye is taabiir maahi kya bane

Dil koh bemaari hogaya lekin kahi mila nahi dawa in kaa....

Reviews

[Farhan Shaikh]

Good use of words and an amazing read..

[Surya]

Thank you farhan...:)

[Priyanshi]

It's good to see that you're improving in hindi...this piece involves Urdu language too....really enjoyed it...especially these lines"mulaqaat na ho woh khoobsurat aafreen ki
Tanhaa sa mann hai kahi koh na jaaye us mulaqqat mein..."...are so wonderful, Keep it up, Surya..You're on the way to be an amazing writer.

[Surya]

Thank you so much for your wonderful words....am glad you liked it...:)

[Priyanshi]

My pleasure, Surya.

[Abhishek Asthana]

wonderful ! great job surya... great to see that you are working so hard on your hindi-urdu skills... slightly there is a difference like "" koh gaye lihaaz hum lihaaz apni raftar ka for ' kho diya humne lihaaz apni raftaar ka'...Dil koh bemaari hogaya lekin kahi mila nahi dawa in kaa for dil ko bemaari ho gayi lekin kahi na mili dawa inki"...ruhaniyat ne diya saza for ruhaniyat ne di saza"....
kaafi kuch seekh rahe hain aap surya ji... i am pleased... thoda hame bhi sikha dijiye... great work done !!

[Surya]

It sounds good and will definitely change it...
Hahahaha, am just learning ji, aap se mein kuch seekna chahiye....hahaha...
Your visit is a pleasure..thank you Abhishek...:)

[Sofia]

Woahh!! This was wonderful... I enjoyed it thoroughly... Truly, i was totally amazed..

[Surya]

Aww, Thank you soooo much Sofia...am glad you enjoyed it...:)

[Sofia]

Pleasure is all mine :)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

this is so wonderful.....surya. i loved each line!wonderful...keep it up!

[Surya]

Thankkkuuuuuu So much Wajiha...:)

[pia]

I see my nameee ayyyyy !!!
Omg this was so well written
Made my grandfather read it
His urdu/ hindi is wonderful
And omg this is great
You are so talented !!

[Surya]

Haha, Yeah Pia in here.....Thank yyou so much Pia for your time reading and appreciating it, am glad for your visit...:)

[Mr.Writer]

An emotional, chilling poem Surya...
I really liked it!
"Ho toh gaya moutjza nazaqat mulaqaat mein
Koh gaye hum lihaaz apni raftaar ka..."
I've lost my manners and appetite...
Amazing! Keep it up

[Surya]

It says....."A wonderful miracle happened in our meeting in which I lost my respect of wandering soul where you occupied it"....
Thank you so much Shaan for your efforts understanding it...am glad for that my friend...:)

[Mr.Writer]

Oh sorry about that Surya, I'm not the best at reading urdu/hindi. No problem :)

[Mr.Writer]

Wonderful possible though! :)

[Mr.Writer]

Wonderful poem though :)

[Surya]

Haha, no issues Shaan...it's all my plsr and thank you..:)