Zinda ...Abibi..

Finding treasures in Hindi/urdu....

Rehgir hai hum, Ek jagah se pyaar kabi nahi hua,

Aaj kya rukhe, Ajnabee se kya mile

Aankhen Tumhari cheen li hum ko,

Muskaan Tumhari rehgayi iss dil me

Jaan toh cheen li tumne, Yaadein chod di

Par kabi mudke nahi dekhi, ab kya kare iss dil ka...

Hum toh shaayar bane marneke baad,

Lekin tu abi zinda hai meri kahani me...

kya kare

mann toh karta hai jaan leneka,

Par kaise, tera jaan toh mera dil me hai,

Koshish to kiya Maarneka,

Par tumhare yaadon me kamzor hogaya...

Ab kya kare, Kaha chale..

Ishq ne hume Kamzoor kardiya...

Naa jaan hai Na tu hai,

Par begum se koyi nahi bataya ki hum abibi zinda hai...

Reviews

[Manasa.L]

Logon ki dil jeethna koi aapse seekhe saab, kya khoob likha hai, galtiya chahe jitni bhi ho un mein par shayari bahu t acchi hai aur us ki andar ki kahani, dard sab kuch bhi utni hi sundar hai.
Thank you fro sharing this wonderful poem.

[Surya]

Thans a lot again for your wonderful review..it means to me...:)

[Manasa.L]

As a community member its my duty to review and appreciate any good poems. No need to thank for that. By the way you are welcome once again.

[Abhishek Asthana]

Well done surya... a heartwarming one... Just i felt some MTI issues in the poem like aankhein tumhari cheen li hamko in for aankhon me tumhari cheen lia hamko,, par kabi mud kar nahi dekhi in for par mud kar nhi dekha..,,, tera jaan to mere dil me h in for teri jaan to mere dil me h..,, koshish ko kia marneka in for koshish to ki marne ki..,,, par begum se koi nhi bataya in for begum se kisine nhi bataya...overall its a great piece...the flow is good...I am delighted to see your efforts... improved a lot :)

[Surya]

I will correct them for sure, Thank you Abhishek for your kind visit and correcting them....A honour I feel....Thanks again...:)

[Priyanshi]

Kitni achi poem likhte ho aap....this poem brought me smile....really another best poem.
"Koshish to kiya Maarneka,
Par tumhare yaadon me kamzor hogaya..."this lines touched me...kitni sachi line hai. logo ki yaade hume weak banaa deti hai...keep it up, Writer sahab.

[Surya]

Haha, sure, but seriously aap, na ji...
Thank you Priyanshi for y kind words and visit...:)

[Priyanshi]

my pleasure, reading your writings.

[Surya]

It's my plsr...Thank you..:)

[Priyanshi]

You're welcome.

[Hope]

"mann toh karta hai jaan leneka,
Par kaise, tera jaan toh mera dil me hai,
Koshish to kiya Maarneka,
Par tumhare yaadon me kamzor hogaya..."
So very touching lines...
You write well in Hindi & English!
Great work, Poet:)

[Surya]

Haha...No I ain't one...Thank you so much Naat..sorryy...Neetha..am glad for your words and visit..:)

[Hope]

Always a pleasure😉

[Farhan Shaikh]

Amazing poem, i enjoyed the beautiful poem

[Surya]

Thnq so much Farhan..:)

[Najam Us Saher]

Waah.....I really liked this...thank you for sharing. Beautifully written.

[Surya]

I liked it too for first time, haha....Thank you so much Saher...am glad you liked it....:)

[Najam Us Saher]

Sometimes we might not like what we write. But others will. You're welcome.

[Wajiha Nayeem]

i loved each line...wonderful and the urdu was beautiful...

[Surya]

I exactly donno the words I used, whether hindi or urdu.....
But thanks alottt dear...:)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

my pleasure...