Dhoondne

Another try....

Sirf taare nahi sitaare hai ye

Anjaani raat me naye sapno ki milan hai

Khuda kahe hum saath hai,

Par Pyaar toh Wahi hai

Udaasi mann me aur door nazar me,

Bahut chupaliye is raat ne, Dhoondne 

ki koshish me khud Gum gaya hu,

Pahadi Junglon aur Chaand taare jeet liya 

Is jeevan ko, seekh raha hu jeevan ka khel

ab to sirf kaamoshi me hi baate chalti hai

Chal raha hu mai saat me bus

Aankon me khushi, Dil me gam...

Har saans me sapna hai, Dhadkan me tera naam hai..

Ab chalta hu, Mujhe dhoondne.....

Reviews

[Manasa.L]

Is badi zindagi mein hum apne aap ko hi bhool jaate hain, sirf kaam karne main aur sikke kamane mein lage rehte hain. Aisi duniya mein apne aapko dhoondne ki bahut zaroori hai. Aur aapne us zaroorath ko bahut khoob likha hai yahan pe. Shukriya.

[Surya]

Exactly, sab koh raha hai khud ka zindagi sikke kamane mein, par zindagi kuch alag cheez hai, dhoondne ki koshish me hi maza aaraha hai,...I accept with your every word..Thank you Manasa for your kind visit and sharing your view here, am glad to have them....Thank you...:)

[Manasa.L]

You are welcome as always.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Filled up with some wonderful words..very good work

[Surya]

Thank you so much Farhannn...:)

[Tony Jordan]

I struggled with Google translate but if this line
"'Ab chalta hu, Mujhe dhoondne....." is what Google says then I found it heart-warming Surya.

[Surya]

Haha, Thank you Tony for your efforts reading it....Am glad for your visit....:)

[Nora]

Well, i am not Indian so i couldn't understand the meaning of the poem but i watches tones of hindi movies so i just know a few words 😂😂😂
Like, sirf i think it means only , nahi = no , hum = we , pyaar = love , bahut = a lot, chaand = moon , kaamoshi = silent, khushi = happiness, dil = heart , naam = name excuse me if there is something wrong 😊😊

[Surya]

NO nothing wromg every word is fine with you...:)...Thank you for your visit..)

[Nora]

You're welcome 😊😊😊😊

[Priyanshi]

wow, its so good....
"Chal raha hu mai saat me bus
Aankon me khushi, Dil me gam...
Har saans me sapna hai, Dhadkan me tera naam hai..
Ab chalta hu, Mujhe dhoondne.....".....these lines are my favourite.
aise poems aur likhte raho, Surya.

[Surya]

With you all as my support I will definitely....Thank you sssoooooo much Priyanshi for your words and visit...am glad for them...:)

[Priyanshi]

My Pleasure.

[Abhishek Asthana]

nicely written surya... it's good to read your hindi stuff as well,,, just a few corrections in words i believe there should be, which are important for readers to ignite their emotions to let their selves get well-connected with your poem...
like "naye sapno"in for naya sapno...khuda for quda...door as in dhoor, ghum as in gum, me saat me as in mai saath me, kaamushi as in khaamoshi, baate chalte hain for baate chalti hain, dil me gam for dil me gham,, dadkan for dhadkan....

great concept and very nice choice of words..i can the see the improvement and i am delighted,,, looking forward to read some more awesome pieces like this... :)

[Surya]

Thanks a lot Abhishek, for your precious time correcting and reading it.....I will definitely correct them....
Thank you for your kind visit and words, Keep visiting and keep correcting....am glad for it..:)

[Abhishek Asthana]

my pleasure friend,, even i am very fond of reading and writing hindi poems since the very beginning...if someone is doing great job as a writer then its should get noticed by other people... as poems are outcome of true emotions and thats what i believe...and u are doing good work in hindi poems as well

[Surya]

Well thanks a ton....Actually am not that proficient in hindi, not my tongue...But yeah Am trying to overcome the lag....Thanks again for correcting them...:)

[Abhishek Asthana]

i do understand,, that's why i really appreciate your efforts... the way you are improving it wouldn't take much time to become a veteran... :)

[Surya]

Haha..will try for sure...thank u..:)

[Hope]

'Ab chalta hu, Mujhe dhoondne....."
I liked these lines very much..
Great work, Surya:)

[Surya]

Thank you so much Naat...am glad you liked it..:)

[Hope]

My pleasure...

[writ rajat]

Quda ko khuda dhoor ko door kaamushi ko khamoshi
Baaki perfect but

[Surya]

I'll correct them, Thank you Rajat for your kind visit, keep visiting jeep correcting....:)

[Najam Us Saher]

A journey on finding yourself. I liked it. It was really good and you have improved a lot. Well done.

[Surya]

Without you all it wont be possible, Thank you Saher for your kind visit and words...am glad you liked it....:)

[Najam Us Saher]

You are most welcome :)

[Sofia]

Lovely one!! First time I got to read something in Hindi!! I love this one..it's very much like a song..Thank you for sharing

[Surya]

Haha, you will get more from now....Thank you Sofia for your kind visit and words....:)

[Sofia]

You're welcome!!