Alone But Alive...

Just words...

Feeling alone in feary world,
Day consumes me, 
Drops occupy Black.

A tear drop with your
Image shines like a moon
In this scary night,
But drop fades away..

Words killing me,
Blood flowing as ink
On my days as sheets,
My life a paint on oily canvas...

I want your smile for 
Hours and hours
Where you lying in my heart,
But now you are away...

Realised, regretted And
Am moving away
From my loss 
At cost of hearts and drops..

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Life is a fine teacher. We are always learning lessons.
"Realised, regretted And
Am moving away
From my loss
At cost of hearts and drops.."
The above lines. Real life and true. Thank you Surya for sharing your amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Surya]

Thank you John...:)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[apennylate]

Day consumes me... Your heart for hours and hours... Killing me... Wow, this was quite the black Vs white verse... Consumingly penned

[Surya]

Yeah it seems to be....Thank you silente for your kind visit and words...am glad for them....:)

[apennylate]

You are most welcome

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"Words killing me,
Blood flowing as ink
On my days as sheets,
My life a paint on oily canvas..."

This was the stanza which attracted me the most. I love your choice of title too. That realization is the turning point, I think, that no matter how alone we are, still we're alive.
Btw, did you mean "fiery"? "feary" doesn't seem right..
A good write, well penned, Surya :)

[Surya]

It is fiery, I will correct it, Thank you Yumna for your kind visit and words, am glad you enjoyed....:)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, Surya. A pleasure always reading your works :)

[Gee]

We all move on from loss of course but the heart seem a to hold pain, anguish, fear longer than happiness, as if to remind us that the good times will one day end.
Nice job Surya

[Surya]

True...Thank you Gee for your kind visit and words..:)

[Stacy Purvis]

We cannot change the past but we can learn from it and move forward.
Tender, raw, real.

[Surya]

Yeah we can learn, Thank you so much Anastasia...:)

[asperatus_]

the most valuable lessons we learn in life often cost the most of ourselves. really lovely work.

[Surya]

Yeah, Thank you for your kind visit and words, Keep visiting...:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

moving away from the pain...but the tears still sting just as much---the loss, the vulnerability...the memories...

j.

[Surya]

They will, Thank you J..:)

[duff]

Emotionally delicate with deep layers to peel back.

"A tear drop with your
Image shines like a moon "

A very cool line. Nicely done.

[Surya]

Thank you duff...:)

[duff]

You're welcome my friend.

[wordman]

just words,but deep and with meaning

[Surya]

Thank you Wordman...:)

[barleygirl]

Since I am a straightforward writer, I am fascinated by writers who can evoke emotion by throwing out a seemingly careless array of images & metaphors, without clearly connecting the dots, but the feelings come thru the word painting clearly anyway. I enjoy the way your metaphors & comparisons are consistent thru-out, with imagery blending ideas of drops, paint, & hearts.

[Surya]

Thank you so much Margie for connecting them....am glad you enjoyed it...:)