Koshish Jeene Ki....

Jeene ki icha hai par

jaan tera saath hai,

sapno se saans le raha hu

par tune dadkan cheen li..

Shayar hu me, par tu meri

Shayari bangayi,

Ajeeb hai ye jeevan ka khel

Jisme seekhne keliye khona hi padta hai...

Dadkan sun nahi pa raha hu

Sirf tumhari hasi kaano me khel rahi hai,

Bulne ki koshish toh kar raha hu

Par yaad bahut aata hai...

 

Author's Note

Another try in hindi, Hope you like it....

Reviews

[Fathom]

So beautiful and emotional. Liked it a lot

[Surya]

Thank you Fathom, am glad you liked it...:)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

that's such a wonderful attempt....that's too good...too nice!

[Surya]

Thank you so much Wajihaa..:)

[Kathleen Montgomery]

It looks good - the words are a work of art even though I do not know the meaning of the words.

[Surya]

Ohh, Thank you for your warm visit, am glad for it...
It's about Missing someone and trying to forget but unable to...:)

[Najam Us Saher]

True feelings nicely expressed....

[Surya]

Thank you so much Saher....:)

[Najam Us Saher]

you're welcome.

[Farhan Shaikh]

This is good surya, i think you should change few words...in the second stanza "tu mera" should be "tu meri" in third stanza second line "sirf tumhaara" should be "sirf tumhaari"..and "kaano me khel raha" should be "kaano me khel rahi hai" otherwise the poem is very good though

[Surya]

Haha, little confusion in describing about gender in hindi...
Well Thank you so much Farhan, I will correct them for sure...:)

[Farhan Shaikh]

Haha! It's fine not a big issue

[Surya]

Changed now....Thank you....:)

[Farhan Shaikh]

Yeah it sounds better now..

[Mr.Writer]

Very lovely, sweet and breathtaking...
I enjoyed it!!

[Surya]

Thank you so much Shaan...am glad you enjoyed...:)

[Mr.Writer]

Your hindi in the poems is so pure and well written, I really enjoy your works Surya

[Surya]

Thank you so much Shaan...It's a pleasure....

[Mr.Writer]

No problem :)

[Priyanshi]

An amazing poem... And that too in Hindi I loved it.
Love someone and wanna forget but can't.... described beautifully it ,Surya.

[Surya]

Thank you so much Priyanshi...credit goes to you too....am glad for your visit and words...:)

[Priyanshi]

pleasure is mine.

[Surya]

No it's mine for your visit, haha...Thank you..:)

[Priyanshi]

you're welcome. haha.