Yaadein..

How does a broken heart feel?, May be this way..

Yaad aate hai woh raat jab hum
Nadi ke kinaare pe saas lete-lete,
Pyaar ki kitaab lik rahe the,
Tab kya pata tha ki aaj 
Sirf me hi padne waala hu...

Ab tu mil bi gaya toh kya kehna
Sirf itna hi hai
"Yaadon ki samundar me tumhara 
Chehra se bara hua khazana ka khaayal rakta hu"..

Author's Note

Just a try...May be good..:) wanna make it better add your views..:)

Reviews

[Amit Dhiman]

Sir ji you make the heights..... Best wishes for you from my side your Hindi poet bro.... #AKD

[Surya]

Thank you so much Amit....:)

[Great Aunt Astri]

OOOOO, now this is interesting!!!!!!. Please do a translation for me,Surya. Although translations are never as good as the original!

[Surya]

Sure mam,....it says-
Every night reminds me of those days
When we were together on banks of river,
Writing books on our love, but
Who knows that one day I will be reading it all alone...

And now even if you come back to me,
Only few words from me to convey
"I will protect my treasure filled with your pleasing eyes in ocean of memories"....

Not good enough in english....but meaning goes same...Thank You Aunt Astri....For your kind visits..am glad you are enjoying them...:)

[Great Aunt Astri]

Yes, I can see the heart-felt sentiment there, but you are right, it probably sounds better in your language ( by the way, if you don't mind me asking, what is your language?)

[Surya]

It's not my tongue even....
Well Telugu is my tongue, hindi I can speak little and english I can manage..

[Great Aunt Astri]

Oh, do you call it tongue? Yes, it is amazing how so many people have different 'tongues' and languages and also speak English. I am in admiration. TELUGU! You have inspired me to look it up in my dictionary (or perhaps, encyclopedia) and write a poem about it.!!!!

[Surya]

Haha...good luck for that..me an inspiration, haha..Thank you..:)

[horizon]

last ki do lines me kuch odd lg rha he..but the first stanza is good

[Surya]

Haan, ok will see to it..Thank you Horizon for your kind visit and appreciated..:)

[Bala Gorthi]

A beautiful write in Hindi with a Urdu touch. A broken heart feels exactly like this. Well done, Surya. Thank you for sharing..

[Surya]

Thank you Bala ji...For your warm words and visit, am glad you enjoyed...:)

[Ayush Mishra]

nadi k kinare pe kitabb likhi..vo bhi sath me...wahh :) good try !!

[Surya]

Haha, Thank you Ayush..:)

[Mamta Sonowal]

Amazing...u also wrote in hindi...it's fantastic...

[Surya]

Thank You Mamta..A lot actually...yup just a try in hindi..:)

[Mamta Sonowal]

ur welc'me...nic try...

[Shabeeh Haider]

Nice nazm. It is sad when two people write the book of love and only one is left to read it.

[Surya]

Yup it is...Thank you Shabeeh Haider for your warm visit and words..:)

[Shabeeh Haider]

Most welcome.
Nice to meet you here.

[Surya]

Thank you..It's my pleasure to meet you..:)

[Ardra]

It's a nice try....
Enjoyed reading it

[Surya]

Thank You Ria for your warm visit and words...:)