Without You...

With You, It's true...

Without you 

mirror doesn't reflect me,

There is no soul in my body,

No pen of mine can write,

No memory of mine is complete.

Every drop of rain striking me

Reminds your touch,

Each melody from waving trees 

Reminds your smiling music.

Every Portrait I sketch reminds

How I miss your magical eyes,

Every tune I play reminds

Your salsa with me.

Every step of mine reminds

Your silly dreams with me,

Every smile of your's 

is a treasure for me.

With you

I can breathe,

I can live,

I smile,

I dance.

Reviews

[Caroline]

Good job this is great ...

[Surya]

Thank you for your kind visit and your time R&R.,,:)

[Rassoul]

Best thing you did so far, go on Surya!

[Surya]

Haha, Thank you Rassoul...:)

[duff]

This might be my favorite that I've read of your work. Everything about it I like. Especially the way you closed it out. Great job.

[Surya]

Ohho, Thank you Duff for yyour visit and words...:)

[duff]

Anytime my friend

[Hope]

Its a totally adorable poem...
The imagery you painted is wonderful...
One of the best poems I have read!
Really great work....:)

[Surya]

Haha, Thank you so much Naat....:)

[Hope]

my pleasure...

[barleygirl]

This is beautifully written! It's not the kind of "love" that I am familiar with, but I know lots of people can relate to this feeling, being "less" without one's beloved. I don't like the feeling of becoming lost without another person, so I don't really enjoy the idea of this kind of love. But since it's a true feeling for many, you've done a great job of showing how it might feel, complete with many well-chosen details to illustrate the situation for this narrator!

[Surya]

Haha, some times some do feel the same...
well Thank you Margie...:)

[Abhishek Asthana]

gorgeously written...emotional write... !!

[Surya]

Yeah, Thank you Abhishek...:)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

great work surya!!
that's such a touching poem...

[Surya]

Thank you Wajiha...:)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

pleasure surya:)

[Priyanshi]

Wow, so beautiful poem. "Every smile of your's is a treasure for me "......... is so sweet line. I really loved it.

[Surya]

Thank you so much Priyanshi for your kind visit and words, Keep visiting...
Am glad you enjoyed...:)

[manisha]

wow what a beautiful poem u have written its so romantic and sweet.How I miss your magical eyes so beautiful line.

[Surya]

Thank you Manisha for your kind visit, am glad you enjoyed..:)

[Anjali]

"every tune I play reminds
Your salsa with me"
My favorite lines. Loved this one!😀

[Surya]

Thank you Anjali for your visit and am glad you enjoyed it...:)

[Anjali]

No problem!😄