Under The Mistletoe

Under a mistletoe, in the winter nights,

Under a yellow light, in yellow flowers,

Playing guitar, singing a melody song,

Just a beautiful night of my life.

In the foggy streets, where I see no one,

Just playing my guitar after ages and 

There you are sitting on a woody bench,

Just staring at you I dropped my heart.

Your pretty smiles, made my heart bounce,

Your blue eyes, flyed everywhere,

Your pink skirt, covered empty streets,

Now it's just you and me under a mistletoe.

I just felt like am in zero gravity,

Flying with you,

Now kiss me baby under the mistletoe,

It's a winter night, Just you and me.

No three empty words for you,

It's whole me for you baby,

Where you and me under a mistletoe.

Author's Note

It happened today.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Usually we only think of kissing under the mistletoe around Christmas time, so it's fun & interesting to read your ideas of this topic woven into a love poem for any time of the year! I like the playful tone & good descriptive details. It sounds like you are a guitar player, very cool way to serenade your beloved. I think you repeated the mistletoe line just the right amount . . . any more & it might sound a little too repetitive.

3rd stanza . . . this word: "flyed" sounds awkward . . . here are a couple ideas:
"blue eyes flew everywhere" . . . or
"blue eyes flitted everywhere"

I think you could delete many of the commas that are inserted into the middle of lines that do not need any pause (commas at the ends of lines sound OK tho).

For future writings, I think you could have shown us the mistletoe by describing how it looks or something more than just this repeating line without any details.

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice tale written and I like the ending.
"No three empty words for you,
It's whole me for you baby,
Where you and me under a mistletoe."
The mistletoe can be a dangerous place. Thank you Surya for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Surya]

Hey Thank you John.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Valentine]

Mistletoe..only at Christmas, that leaves a long time between kisses. Valentine

[Surya]

Haan, Thank you for your visit Kathie.

[Bala Gorthi]

You have crafted a romantic set, the most ideal location in the second stanza where the heart is bound to go crazy especially when you have your beloved by your side. I loved the set up and the craft
Thank you for sharing Surya.

[Surya]

Thank you Bala.

[Pravir]

Fulllyyy romanticccc . . . . . love in the air . . . great work bro . . keep sharing dese butiful feelings

[Surya]

Thank you Pravir for your kind visit.

[Johnny Dep]

Under a mistletoe, just you and me.
Haha, beautiful write surya.
Waiting for such a day.

[Surya]

Hahaha, Thank you Johnny.