My Thought

Sun or Moon, Day and Night remains the same,

Today or Tomorrow, Time remains the same,

Here or There, Nature remains the same,

Candle or Cigar, Lit by same fire,

He or She, Both have emotions,

You or Me, we breathe the same air.

 

We born alone, we die alone,

Then why the hell this money

Plays a big role in our lives.

 

We are humans,

You for me and Me for you.

 

I wanna see this world circled with humanity,

Where I can sacrifice my life for you and

Your's for others.

Reviews

[Anindita Janhabee]

Clearly depicts my emotions ... my thoughts too...
Money is a mere piece of paper which is more important for people than their lives and happiness....
You for me and me for you
Shouldn't ever bring such
Elements which aren't really true.....
Each time I read your work
I lose myself in your words
Cause somewhere I find
Lines show me my swords...
Beauty of your poetry
At the words my eyes stuck
Feeling your emotions as mine
I totally forgot what's luck...
Keep writing amazing
Never look back
Cause I'm here to support you
I know nothing you lack.....

👏👏👏👍👍👍

[Surya]

Thank you Anindita.

[Anindita Janhabee]

My pleasure reading...

[Najam Us Saher]

I liked the message of this poem and I do agree with it.

[Surya]

Thank you for joining me and Thank you for appreciating ...:)

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome ☺

[APOORVA]

We born alone, we die alone,
Then why the hell this money
Plays a big role in our lives.

We are humans,
You for me and Me for you.


. connect and say that this is real heartfelt emotion you have expressed here.
i can relate to this
life waits for no none, we come we go what remains is how we lived

[Surya]

Yeah exactly you got my point Apoorva ji.Thank you for your visit.

[Michael S]

Wow...a nice message is there in this..I liked it, Surya.

[Surya]

Thak you Michael :)

[barleygirl]

This feels abstract to me in the first stanza. These comparisons do not feel obvious or like they follow a linear point you're trying to make. At the end of first stanza, then I can put it together to mean that we all go thru similar things, we are all similar in the way we react to things, etc. But the earlier lines -- altho they sound poetic & interesting -- it seems like an abstract comparison, as the meaning is not obvious or easy to figure out as we are first reading the first four lines. By the way, little correction on the last line: "breathe" (verb has "e" at the end . . . no "e" is noun).

I feel the most significant point being made in your poem is the part about how money seems to hold a more important place in our minds & hearts than other people & the welfare of people in general. I think the second stanza could be expanded to show more of this idea & how it looks & why it's not a good thing. It feels like you're only just skimming the top of the deeper meaning of your words. It feels like you're holding back from coming right out & speaking strongly about what is obviously bothering you about the love of money over humanity. I encourage you to take off the inhibitions that bind you to this brief & incomplete statement of what you seem to be burning to say. It feels like I'm getting little glimpses & from this I can tell you have something deep & important to say here.

[Surya]

First of all, Thank you for your time reading and awardding me with a review.
Yeah, I have something deep to say, but I have shown what makes us humans, And a glimpse on what doesn't make us humans or reducing ur humanity.
And I thought people should get this message on their own, without me providing detailed structure on money and how it is leading to extinction of humanity.
Once again, Thank you Margie, For your patience and trying to understand this.

[miahstr]

Good. I also hope for a more altruistic world. Keep the writing coming.
Cheers

[Surya]

Yeah, Hpe so. Thank you

[Evans]

You are open to what you see and think and that's rare for some people.
-Evans

[Surya]

I guess and thank you.