A Heart In The Cold Breeze

The day I first saw you is

The day that turned me

from a rockstar to a melody singer

The moment I look into your eyes 

I can see the cold mountains with a 

Romantic flow of snow from

Your eyes to mine and 

The moment I hug you, 

makes my heart warm so that

You, my love, can stay in my heart

Warm in the cold breeze.

Author's Note

Hey there, This is my first writing in prose style, treat me as a friend and correct me wherever possible.

Reviews

[Anindita Janhabee]

U know what, there r two ways to read a Poem... one by words..other by emotions... when u read by words, u can judge the poem and appreciate.. when u read by emotions, u can feel and appreciate...
i tried the second one here... so no suggestions.. sorry....
i loved it... very much...
it was really so warm, full of desires...

[Surya]

Thank you.You got a feel on this writing, Am so glad for that.

[Anindita Janhabee]

I'm glad to read this too!!!😃

[Najam Us Saher]

This is so romantic. I liked the way you have described the way you felt according to the days. 😀 Beautifully written.

[Surya]

Thank you....:) keep visiting...

[Najam Us Saher]

Yep...I will.....You're welcome ☺

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"The day I first saw you is
The day that turned me
from a rockstar to a melody singer"

The last line of this stanza made me laugh. It's funny how some people influence us so much that we change ourselves entirely for them. Guess that's what love really is all about..
Nicely penned. Quite smooth :)

[Surya]

Haha, Thank you and that's what it is...:)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome! A pleasure always :)

[Farha Nayamee]

a warm and simple poem with some good emotical feelings....good one....

[Surya]

Thank you..

[Valentine]

Very nice for a first write. We all start somewhere, just keep a notepad handy and jot down lines when they come to you. Later a poem may come out of your notes. Valentine

[Surya]

Thank you..!

[barleygirl]

The first thing that impresses me is originality . . . your writing sounds unique & I like that. The next thing I enjoy is when a writer uses two opposing sensations or forces, such as cold & warmth. You've woven these sensations together in a meaningful way, that feels sincere. The first stanza is worthy of putting on a poster on one's wall, it's so original & vivid in meaning.

[Surya]

Hey Thank you for that....

[MOON]

Romantic write, full of emotion.

[Surya]

Thank you..

[Brandon Wernke]

Very good. It made me smile to read this. Thank you for sharing!

[Surya]

Thank you..

[Ashish]

So romantic ;)
Last two lines were fantastic...

[Surya]

Ohh!!So sweet I like them too.....Thank u Thank u..

[Coyote Poetry]

Kind, honest and good words for the want of love.
"You, my love, can stay in my heart
Warm in the cold breeze."
I liked the above lines. Thank you Surya for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Surya]

Thank you.Realyy it means a lot me that you said the word excellent.Ohh! god control my happiness.

[Coyote Poetry]

I'm glad and you are welcome.