U know what, there r two ways to read a Poem... one by words..other by emotions... when u read by words, u can judge the poem and appreciate.. when u read by emotions, u can feel and appreciate...
i tried the second one here... so no suggestions.. sorry....
i loved it... very much...
it was really so warm, full of desires...
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thank you.You got a feel on this writing, Am so glad for that.
"The day I first saw you is
the day that turned me
from a rockstar to a melody singer"....so delighting lines....power of love to turn's a rockstar into a melody singer....superb poem.
Yeah...haha...Thank you so much Priyanshi it means to me, as i i my very first write of my poetic li.. read moreYeah...haha...Thank you so much Priyanshi it means to me, as i i my very first write of my poetic life...:)
7 Years Ago
Always my pleasure....though first write but great.
wowiee surya!
i just wanted to suggest you that..
''the moment i hug you makes my heart warm''
instead you can write it as..''the moment i hug you i find my heart feeling the warmth of your touch''..
just a suggestion as you are my friend and overall it's just lovely and a pretty write!!
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Ahh, That's good too...
Thank you Wajiha for your kind words....am glad you enjoyed..:)
Well here you are addressing that love. I love the quality you are attributing to your love. A quality of changing and transforming the other. Offering the warmth to the cold mountains there by bringing in two extremities in one place. Interesting, Surya!
Thank you for this beautifully presented tender emotions.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
To be honest this is my first write in life....Thank you for your words and appreciation, am glad..... read moreTo be honest this is my first write in life....Thank you for your words and appreciation, am glad...:)
7 Years Ago
We must treasure our first writes as they are. I am glad that your first write is beautiful as it is.. read moreWe must treasure our first writes as they are. I am glad that your first write is beautiful as it is.
Mmm prose style requires a heavy imagery. I believe yours is almost there but needs a little bit push into imagery. The words are simple and clear which is good since prose style can simply be like that.
"from a rockstar to a melody singer" this one could be better I guess, I just want more imagery on this level. You can do it Surya. :) Keep writing.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Haha, Thank you for your encouragement and support....This was my first write....and will best to co.. read moreHaha, Thank you for your encouragement and support....This was my first write....and will best to come in upcoming writes...
Words aren't just words, its a feel, emotion, happiness, sadness, and everything that we could think of. Surya, my friend you have an amazing talent of mesmerizing people with your words.
This poem shows how good you can be in any form of writing given to you.
Well done :)
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Hohoho.....Thank you, Thanks a lot...your words truly now means a lot, haha....Thanks a ton...:)