A Heart In The Cold Breeze

A Heart In The Cold Breeze

A Poem by Surya

The day I first saw you is
The day that turned me
from a rockstar to a melody singer
The moment I look into your eyes 
I can see the cold mountains with a 
Romantic flow of snow from
Your eyes to mine and 
The moment I hug you, 
makes my heart warm so that
You, my love, can stay in my heart
Warm in the cold breeze.

© 2017 Surya


Author's Note

Surya
Hey there, This is my first writing in prose style, treat me as a friend and correct me wherever possible.

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U know what, there r two ways to read a Poem... one by words..other by emotions... when u read by words, u can judge the poem and appreciate.. when u read by emotions, u can feel and appreciate...
i tried the second one here... so no suggestions.. sorry....
i loved it... very much...
it was really so warm, full of desires...

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Surya

7 Years Ago

Thank you.You got a feel on this writing, Am so glad for that.
Anindita Janhabee

7 Years Ago

I'm glad to read this too!!!😃



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"The day I first saw you is
the day that turned me
from a rockstar to a melody singer"....so delighting lines....power of love to turn's a rockstar into a melody singer....superb poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Surya

7 Years Ago

Yeah...haha...Thank you so much Priyanshi it means to me, as i i my very first write of my poetic li.. read more
Priyanshi

7 Years Ago

Always my pleasure....though first write but great.
Surya

7 Years Ago

That's a pleasure..Thank you:)
A fine first attempt.
Equally great is the imagery.
Poetic prose:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Surya

7 Years Ago

This is the very first write of my poetic life....Thank you so much Neetha...:)
Hope

7 Years Ago

My pleasure
wowiee surya!
i just wanted to suggest you that..
''the moment i hug you makes my heart warm''
instead you can write it as..''the moment i hug you i find my heart feeling the warmth of your touch''..
just a suggestion as you are my friend and overall it's just lovely and a pretty write!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Surya

7 Years Ago

Ahh, That's good too...
Thank you Wajiha for your kind words....am glad you enjoyed..:)
Wajiha Nayeem

7 Years Ago

hey!...anytime..my pleasure..
short romantic write,,, lovely creation,,, keep writing

Posted 7 Years Ago


Surya

7 Years Ago

Thank you Abhishek...:)
Surya

7 Years Ago

Thank you Abhishek...:)
So beautiful... lovely... filled with amazing words!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Surya

7 Years Ago

Aw!, Thank You Mr.Writer for your kind visit..:)
Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

No problem :)
The last few lines are so beautiful!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Surya

7 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind visit, keep visiting..:)
Wow such a wonderful work Surya, very good 😊

Posted 7 Years Ago


Surya

7 Years Ago

Thank you Farhan...:)
Well here you are addressing that love. I love the quality you are attributing to your love. A quality of changing and transforming the other. Offering the warmth to the cold mountains there by bringing in two extremities in one place. Interesting, Surya!
Thank you for this beautifully presented tender emotions.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Surya

7 Years Ago

To be honest this is my first write in life....Thank you for your words and appreciation, am glad..... read more
Bala Gorthi

7 Years Ago

We must treasure our first writes as they are. I am glad that your first write is beautiful as it is.. read more
Mmm prose style requires a heavy imagery. I believe yours is almost there but needs a little bit push into imagery. The words are simple and clear which is good since prose style can simply be like that.
"from a rockstar to a melody singer" this one could be better I guess, I just want more imagery on this level. You can do it Surya. :) Keep writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Surya

7 Years Ago

Haha, Thank you for your encouragement and support....This was my first write....and will best to co.. read more
Words aren't just words, its a feel, emotion, happiness, sadness, and everything that we could think of. Surya, my friend you have an amazing talent of mesmerizing people with your words.
This poem shows how good you can be in any form of writing given to you.
Well done :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Surya

7 Years Ago

Hohoho.....Thank you, Thanks a lot...your words truly now means a lot, haha....Thanks a ton...:)
Manasa.L

7 Years Ago

you are welcome

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Added on November 8, 2016
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