Yes I am Mad

When sometimes things get out of hand :p

Light comes and goes, like on, and of again,
Time, bridges itself to itself, and everything flows,,
I, bridge myself to my non-self and everything explodes,
This and that, and I can't say what,
But as far as I'm sure,
It's all been known before, and never knowable again,
Like sun, and snow,,,,
Then the heart in my heart, plays a music from beyond,,,,

And yes,,,,,
I get mad,
Cause all of this is too much for me,
The vastness of the sky and the stillness of the sea,
Oh yes, I get mad,,,,
Awh, such beauty, and I, cannot keep it,
And all I can do, life,,,, is give it back to you....

All these memories and reminiscence,
manifest at the speed that's many times faster than that of light,
like zippp!
and pass this moment and go to the eternal journey of time,
and disappear somewhere far beyond my mind,
and BOOM!
Another moment, a leaf falls down, slowly gliding around,
dancing with the wind on its way to the ground,
whence I live lives after lives in few seconds,

And yes,,,,,
I get mad,
Cause all of this is too much for me,
The vastness of the sky and the stillness of the sea,
Oh yes, I get mad,,,,
Awh, such beauty, and I, cannot keep it,
And all I can do, life,,,, is give it back to you....

Yes, these are just moments, just flashes of moments,
yet eternity over eternity over eternity, 
like zzooopp.
time stops, music stops....
and ooouuhhh!
It starts again,and dreams collide, in bumpy tricky lane of time,
and sweat sound reverbs against the age old depths of life,
like the music plays, the whole of itself, in every beat,
life rolls again, makes you high,
and blip! it dies.
and flip! takes a new birth again,

And yes,,,,,
I get mad,
Cause all of this is too much for me,
The vastness of the sky and the stillness of the sea,
Oh yes, I get mad,,,,
Awh, such beauty, and I, cannot keep it,
And all I can do, life,,,, is give it back to you....

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

ok I absolutely adore this.. the deep thought, the introspect, the word play... pretty excellent here my friend.. I do have a few suggestions... like always take em or leave em, just sharing...

in keeping with the repetitious word play think it would flow better this way..
"But as far as I (know),
It's all been known before, and never knowable again,"

maybe switch this up a tad.. more word play....

"And all I can do, (in) life,,,, is (life) give(n) back to you.... (think it keeps with word play and would change them all to match, again --just my opinion)..

not sure about this one.. flows ok I guess.. maybe would change the last "lives"
"whence I live lives after (living) in (fleeting) few seconds,"

awesome piece, I LOVE THIS ONE!!

[Sunya]

I wrote it that way :) 'But as far as i'm sure' :D and also 'all i can do, life,,, is give it back to you' :) i think its just how its supposed to be :D sorry dont mind me but i dont think i'll keep this one :)
thankyou April :)
your suggestions are always appreciated
I am glad you loved it :)

[AprilRN1210]

understand completely my friend.. I am the same.. sometimes will change after suggestions, other times, like ummm nope.. like it as is.. highly respect that!.. heck yea.. just wouldn't be me, if I didn't offer any.. :P
you're welcome..

[Sunya]

hahaha yea it wouldnt be you :) as supportive and as lovely as ever :) thankyou :)

[Saddam]

All these memories and reminiscence,
manifest at the speed that's many times faster than that of light,

Am emotional piece here. I like its wording and good skill of uses them. Really enjoyed piece.

[anne]

I liked many things about it.......
Light comes and goes, like on, and of again,
Time, bridges itself to itself, and everything flows,,...

Like sun, and snow,,,,
Then the heart in my heart, plays a music from beyond,,,,..

All these memories and reminiscence,
manifest at the speed that's many times faster than that of light,
like zippp!
and pass this moment and go to the eternal journey of time,
and disappear somewhere far beyond my mind,.......

Yes, these are just moments, just flashes of moments,
yet eternity over eternity over eternity, .......

Cause all of this is too much for me,
The vastness of the sky and the stillness of the sea,
Oh yes, I get mad,,,,
Awh, such beauty, and I, cannot keep it,
And all I can do, life,,,, is give it back to you......
it was a beautiful poem ...great work..loved reading it....:))

[Surya pradha]

an emotional masterpiece. well written!

[Sunya]

Thankyou :)

[Frontier]

Aww this was amazing! I get mad too!!!!

"I, bridge myself to my non-self and everything explodes," - i love this!

[Sunya]

Every person with a heart of a poet and eyes of a dreamer gets mad :D
Thankyou :) I am glad you loved it