freedom is scary.. sometimes that prison becomes a comfort.. sometimes we think it will become what it once was again... sometimes we just don't want to be alone.. once you figure out it is a game, they go and change the rules on you again it seems like.. take the blinders off, look.. don't be afraid of what you will find.. look fear in the face---it is never as bad as you think... what a thought-provoking piece my friend.. use of repetition is nice in this one, it makes the piece more powerful.. well done...
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10 Years Ago
Thankyou April :) freedom is scary because maybe we are not used to it..you are so right about every.. read moreThankyou April :) freedom is scary because maybe we are not used to it..you are so right about everything :) I am glad you liked it
10 Years Ago
you're welcome my friend.. it is always a pleasure :)
Freedom from all associations of my existence? Scary indeed, we step back with a start from the lip of that chasm that's us. Embarrassed, ashamed- yes again. You give a voice to so much complexity with amazing ease, Sunya. I'm impressed!
At the end of the day, we must all look ourselves in the eye every time we look in the mirror. If we don't like what we see, we have only ourselves to blame. And, sometimes, the mirror is the image others show us of ourselves.
Notes: There is never a correct usage for multiple commas. The multiple periods is always limited to just three for correctness; in fact, there is a symbol available in your key caps for the three periods called an ellipse. If you're using the letter "u" for "you" in this fashion, I recommend capitalizing it, as you do the personal pronoun, for more poetic impact; then, it looks deliberate instead of looking like you were just too lackadaisical to spell out "you."
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10 Years Ago
At the end of the day, the mirror should show no reflection of us but the world that is inside and a.. read moreAt the end of the day, the mirror should show no reflection of us but the world that is inside and all around us :)
The poem is about a call from the divine, not retrospection
Yes the comas were not intended to be used correctly, sometimes it shouldnt matter how right you are or how wrong..And yes i will capitalize 'u' :)
Thanx for the tips btw and thanx for taking the time to review :)
Much appreciated
freedom is scary.. sometimes that prison becomes a comfort.. sometimes we think it will become what it once was again... sometimes we just don't want to be alone.. once you figure out it is a game, they go and change the rules on you again it seems like.. take the blinders off, look.. don't be afraid of what you will find.. look fear in the face---it is never as bad as you think... what a thought-provoking piece my friend.. use of repetition is nice in this one, it makes the piece more powerful.. well done...
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thankyou April :) freedom is scary because maybe we are not used to it..you are so right about every.. read moreThankyou April :) freedom is scary because maybe we are not used to it..you are so right about everything :) I am glad you liked it
10 Years Ago
you're welcome my friend.. it is always a pleasure :)
I am a laughter, a tear and both,
A subtle sense of knowing the whole,
A space in which the ALL evolves,
A celebration of eternal, where ALL dissolves,
A candle rooted on its candlestick,
I am .. more..