My Plight

with misunderstood feelings,

this song rolls again,

as my tears of empathy,

from the broken heart that could mend one.

to speak two words of wisdom,

to the mass of unwise,

the wise needs to become unwise himself,

and match the steps that could ease.

I cant declare myself a lunatic,

and walk away in comfort.

may be,

there's a deep harmony that we cannot realize,

so deep down my heart a voice keeps coming,

that someday the ignorant, 

will listen to my songs,

or may be my vision is still so shallow,

that I cant see my heart inside your heart,

I see that the wind carries the sand,

and the sand doesn't defend,

and by and by the desert changes, is shape,

without looking at the mirror,

and the wind again comes without complaining,

as if they know all about each other,

I sometimes wonder, if we could 

ever 

walk together,

like the sand in the wind,

but its too difficult when the sand forgets that it's the desert,

I dream of a wordless gossip,

and i don't know why but I am sure it will happen,

or if it ever happens this way,

I shall call it my life's plight,

that the sun doesn't set,

it only shines on the other side.

I thank the nature, that brings us together,

even if we don't meet,

I am always moving from my shore to your shore,

and you are also moving from your shore to mine,

and the paradox continues as we move further from our shore,

The other shore moves further away,

may be this harmony between us,

is not an evolution of the communication,

but a unity somewhere, 

from where we both took birth out of the same dust.

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

awwww, what a sweet lovely write... I love the way you always write such touching reflective pieces that feel so "intimate" and soothing.. ideas and thoughts flowing like the stream, lifting and moving..
can I make a few suggestions?

"and by and by the desert changes is shape".... maybe change to "its" shape

"I sometimes wonder, if we ever could walk together,"... totally preference I know, but think it flows better with "ever" after "could"...

"but its too difficult when the sand forget that is the desert,"....( (it's) needs an apostrophe... think it would sound better to say... "but it's too difficult when the sand forgets that it's the desert"...

"and i don,t know why but I am sure it will happen,"...( I) needs to be capitalized and "don't" has a comma instead of apostrophe....

"or if it never happens the way,"... would change to... "or if it ever happens this way"...

"and you are also moving from your shore to my shore,"... would change to... "and you are always moving from your shore to mine"....

"and paradox! that the other shore goes further,
as we move further from our shore,"..... would probably rearrange this one...
"and the paradox continues as we move further from our shore,
the other shore moves further away."

some of the "i's" need to be capitalized throughout.. some are, and some are not... not sure if you meant this...

otherwise well done... you always take me to a deep place and love the way your ideas always flow on the page...

[Sunya]

Thankyou for the wonderful review April..well the first correction you pointed out was meant to be 'is' because the desert changes nothing other than its shape, so by and by the desert changes, is shape..maybe a comma will do good :D
The other corrections are very helpful :) I cant just figure out how to edit the poem :/
The I's being capital and small was just me being lazy at times :P hehe
Thankyou for being so sweet and taking the time to write something helpful :) Appreciated sooo much :)
-Sunya