Rain

It helped me connect with feelings

Rain rain it slowly falls
Washing away a lot of things
But not my guilty mind
And I don't care what it brings

The wetness overwhelmes me
As I start my day
Maybey if I stand real still
The rain will take me away

Away from all the hurt
Away from all the pain
This is where I want to be
Away from all the rain

The rain falling down
Splashes on the ground
It makes me think of all my pain
Which was lost but now is found

I like the pain it's good
It makes me feel something now
I haven't felt anything in a long time
Something I didn't want to allow

The rain splashes on my face
And slowly I start to smile
I'm starting to feel other things
Something I haven't felt in awhile

Being happy is new for me
I have never felt this way
The rain brought back this part of me
That I had put away

I look at the rain differently today
It us so beautiful now
It is washing away all of the pain
And renews my spirit somehow

My wish is this
For everyone to see its true
How it can heal yourself
If you want it to

Karen miller

Reviews

[DaughterNature]

The flow of ideas is nice, like the progression of a rainstorm (although, I guess I would caution you that rain can almost become a cliched idea in poetry). I like a lot of the ideas in your poems, but I've realized that you use the same ABCB rhyme scheme in every one that I've read -- is that just what you learned, or does it feel most comfortable to you? As always, your poetry belongs to you first and foremost, but if you want it to be something accessible to others, changing the rhyme scheme will keep a reader's interest and help reduce circular logic in your poem due to trying to match rhyming words on the "right" lines. I would encourage you to explore other rhyme schemes and poetic forms (if you look at the poems I've posted, you'll see I've tried a lot of different forms). Cheers.

[Dominic Shaya]

From not feeling anything to feeling pain to healing and happiness.I love the flow in this poem.Great work eliza!

[Dhaye]

This is sad but beautifully written. But do you know, that we are just the same? Before, my muse in my sad poems is the rain for that time it represents pain for me. But someone here has taught me how beautiful the rain is. And so I started loving the rain. Now, I have a different outlook because of this inspiring writer with his inspiring pieces. You can check this piece:
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Tonyo247/1210376/
I hope you'll enjoy it be inspired, too.

[Bluefire]

This is beautiful and the flow is like a song. I could almost hear you singing itvwith a few soft cassical guitar notes. I could really relate to this and I love the messagevat the end. It was like a cloudy, rainy day that opened into a rainbow and sunshine at the end.
Well done!

[Lourisa]

You got my attention, Karen. No person who has not gone through intense emotional pain and agony could write such a powerful poem. Your imagery fits perfectly. I like how you use the rain as a reminder of your pain but then that same rain washes away the pain, it's as if cognitively we have to become aware of our pain before we can use that same cognition to help us heal. The poem ended on a beautiful, compassionate note. This is a lovely poem, Karen, one I can identify with deeply - at least with the first half, but hopefully one day with the second part as well. It is always an honour reading great poetry. Keep writing.