The Hallway

Depressing,

         quiet,

         desolate.

 

Dim lights,

       wind echoing,

                                      creaking floors.

 

There I sit, in such a place, all alone.

Your footsteps have disappeared and your shadow no more, yet,

your spirit lingers next to me.

 

Your breath is emotionless, and your touch still haunts me,

so I close my eyes, but your shape remains.

 

Memories stuck on replay, voice on max volume,

my tears rain down as I beg for your embrace.

 

You smile at my pain, you dig the knife deeper,

and all I can do is sit in silence as I wait for you to clean up the mess you made.

 

Instead though, the mess expands, and my soul begins to puddle while my heart slows down

and then one by one, the lights go out

       leaving nothing, but

      permanent

 DARKNESS.

Author's Note

Got inspired by this piece when I was sitting by myself in a hallway waiting for one of my classes to start today. Hope you like it!

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem. The poem started with struggle and got more deep into loneliness and pain. No weakness in this poem. A lot of struggle and heading off in the wrong direction. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Bloody_Stars]

Lol nice inspiration. But i loved it. It reminded me of my friend who died recently, well just the beginnig did. But i still loved it :)

[Don Shaw]

Great flow and very powerful. Great work.

[Becky C Strukamp]

This is an amazing poem. The flow of words and your chosen words blend well.
Your inspiration developed a powerful, moving write. Excellent write.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

A deep write that captures the hauntiness so well that I feel I was actually in the hallway wit my feelings!!!

[EMF]

Wow. It's taken me hours to get the chance to read this and I'm so glad I did. Wonderfully dark and desolate. You handle the words like a craftsman. Not a word misplaced or out of perfect alignment. A superb noir. I stand in awe

[Sleeping Maiden]

Such an interesting piece this. I love the imagery that plays in my mind when I was reading this! It's a really good poem. I enjoyed reading it. It's very deep. =D
Fantastic write!

[penless writer]

You captured the feelings of love and the hurt it brings very well.
I really want to see the continuation of this poem which ends happy.
Just an absurd idea....