The Hallway

Depressing,

         quiet,

         desolate.

 

Dim lights,

       wind echoing,

                                      creaking floors.

 

There I sit, in such a place, all alone.

Your footsteps have disappeared and your shadow no more, yet,

your spirit lingers next to me.

 

Your breath is emotionless, and your touch still haunts me,

so I close my eyes, but your shape remains.

 

Memories stuck on replay, voice on max volume,

my tears rain down as I beg for your embrace.

 

You smile at my pain, you dig the knife deeper,

and all I can do is sit in silence as I wait for you to clean up the mess you made.

 

Instead though, the mess expands, and my soul begins to puddle while my heart slows down

and then one by one, the lights go out

       leaving nothing, but

      permanent

 DARKNESS.

Author's Note

Got inspired by this piece when I was sitting by myself in a hallway waiting for one of my classes to start today. Hope you like it!

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem. The poem started with struggle and got more deep into loneliness and pain. No weakness in this poem. A lot of struggle and heading off in the wrong direction. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Chris]

The trouble with writing is we begin with our minds in apparent control and yet the longer we empower the thoughts to flow it seems THEY have the control. Near the end we are witnesses to our selves meandering off and on their own.

Chris

[Ben]

Great and beautiful poem,i really like it.

[Sakib]

I loved the structure of the poem. This is really amazing how you got inspired. Nice poem.

[~Blue Fantasy~]

Very powerful! Excellent write...very sad too.

[Thea]

That was really stunning...Great feelings you crafted here... :)))

[joshua deathdealer]

I love the format. It really adds to the haunting feel of being extremely alone. Nicely done and great flow btw.

[Chris Taylor]

I enjoyed the smokey, ethereal feel to this whole poem. I could feel the overwhelming sense of hurt and loneliness in the piece as well. I was very fond of the line:'..and all I can do is sit in silence as I wait for you to clean up the mess you made." A fun and serious poem to read.

[Colie]

This is such a powerful poem.. very emotional mixed into one. I enjoyed it very much.

[stars are far]

nice one ...

[Dove]

Such a powerful poem. So much loneliness and pain! But this poem was excellant. Thank you for sharing this piece.