Imaginary Beloved

Her hair dense as darkness,

Her face rich as the full moon:

Unbelievable contrasts

Couched in a seat of love.

Her eyes rival lotuses.

Seeing that girl today,

My eager heart 

Is driven by desire.

Innocence and beauty

Adore her fair skin.

Reviews

[Ananya]

Beautiful and touching. Innocent love

[Ana B.]

Beautiful and uplifting in its sincerity and innocence. Lovely :)

[Indu]

hi'
it's a very simple poem with a simple truth of firstsight love.

[Sunrising]

Hi, indu
Thank you for reading......... I am glad you like it.............

[James]

Good imagery, a nice sensual write "driven by desire"

[iamshadowine]

loved these lines
"My eager heart
Is driven by desire.
Innocence and beauty
Adore her fair skin."
great job!
keep writing :D

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

Very short, but full of meaning. I appreciate how you use your simile to convey it. Well articulated.

[Philip Muls]

Her eyes rival lotuses. Powerful.

[DorothyParker]

She sounds like a heart-breaker! :)

[Sunrising]

Thanks for reading!

[.]

Wow! Major improvement Jay!

This is a very alluring and sensual poem. Lovely images and a well written piece.

A beautiful dedication to the object of your affection.

Very nice work!

[Sunrising]

Thank you for reviewing and your encouragement. ..... :-)

[Insight "MH"]

The wording shows how passionate you are as a person. Thank you for sharing.

[Sunrising]

Thank you for reading.... !

[Insight "MH"]

You are welcome.