On Love

Simple piece

On love

How so close is your soul with mine,

I am sure everything you think goes through my mind.

 

I am with you anytime and everyday

Not like a host caring for you at a feat alone.

 

With you I am glad

Whole times

The time I offer my life

Or the time you gift me

 

And the moment

When you are all confused

Leaps forth a voice

Hold me close

I am love and

I am always yours

Author's Note

Any comment appreciated..

Reviews

[Matching Socks]

A very lovely romantic poem.

[Sunrising]

Yes, It is so romantic... Thank you for reading it....

[JayG]

This is a letter to a lover, broken into individual lines. Heartfelt, yes. But to anyone but the lover it's YOUR emotion. What you want to do is say it in a way so pretty, or evocative, that the reader is moved to show it to their own love, along with, "I can't say how I feel as beautifully as this, but it's how I feel about you."

It's why people still send Shakespeare's sonnets to the one they love, but remembed the piece I wrote for about thirty seconds.

Our goal, and it's a b***h to achieve, is to make the reader say, "I wish I'd written that," not "Uh-huh." ;)

[Sunrising]

Thank you JayG, for reading and reviewing it... :-)

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Ah, yes, now I see the Sunrising, and he speaks "On love" with beautifully, emotional ink :)

[Sunrising]

Than you for reviewing it... :-)

[James]

Nice. I really like the first two lines. Love is one of those eternal subjects that never gets old and we are always searching for new ways to describe it and express it.

[Sunrising]

I agree with you, James... Thanks for reading and your kind words...

[Nisreen]

I never thought it be possible to place a voice to love
But if love as an emotion could speak
I guess those would be the perfect words
Bravo :)

[Sunrising]

Thank you, Nisreen, for reading and reviewing... :-)

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A very good beginning to your writerscafe life, Jay.

A very timely piece of writing, a universal theme.

Lovingly written. Protect that love. Or join my line.

A great start! Keep writing.

[Sunrising]

Thank you, Jay for reading and encouragement. :-)