Negative Mass

12/09

 

 

There is a sharp curve

To her every angle

She holds fast to

What she believes in.

So full of herself

With pride and disgust

She is empty

She is angry

She is strong

If she just keeps fighting.

They want more from her

Want her to fill up every

Corner of the room

So she plays a game

She knows how to win

Pretty soon she is only

Skin

And bones.

Cold and weak

Chilled to core

But she’s not done yet

She wants more more more

Tipping the scale

To negative infinity

Only then

Will she be satisfied

When her body runs away

With the night

Author's Note

any criticism is good!

Reviews

[Rachel U.]

The only criticism I have for this is for the punctuation. Most of the poem is completely without it, except for two lines (which have periods). Generally, you either have punctuation, or you don't.
//So she plays a game
She knows how to win
Pretty soon she is only
Skin
And bones.//
Favourite lines. :)

[Mary]

really good take on this important issue!!!

[there is no more from m..]

this was really good i liked this well done :)