I Can Save You (Mr.Hyde)

 

I can hear it in the way you say his name.
The two syllables slip passed your lips in ecstasy.
Sweet honey on the lips of a beggar.
A prayer on the lips of a sinner.
While the kiss of Destiny passes you by
and for you that's just fine.
but I find , I'm just a safe place you can hide.
The world is cruel, and closed are minds
But my mind and arms are open and I'm hoping you can find safe refuge in my heart.
There's room enough for the both of us.

And your touch...

Premature in its delivery, but full of intention

Stroking my skin and confidence

Coaxing a broken soul back from the brink of extinction

Bringing life into these brittle bones

And I can’t thank you enough for that

 

But I have swam in a sea of my own tears

Felt the cold of a shoulder too blind to see

That the only one ever to suffer was me

Been denied my only request to be loved

I’d rather be cut, cursed, shaken, or shoved

Battered, broken, bruised, branded or bled

Strung up from a tree or shot in the head

Then go another day as “just a good friend”

 

There’s hope in my heart and that’s why I have stayed

But consider the debt for my life repaid

You were once one to whom I’d confide

But now I feel the one I once loved has died.

You push and you pull to see if I’ll break

I fear that I might. You must give some to take

So I’ll say this again

I do love you

But hope when you say it too that what you say is true.
Because I don't need a parrot.
What I need is you.

Reviews

[Jon]

I liked this a lot. A great insight into what it can be to feel unrequited and yet hold on with hope - some people do "push and pull to see if I'll break" - the kind of people who tend to realise what they've got when its gone.

I particularly liked the second last stanza-

"But I have swam in a sea of my own tears
Felt the cold of a shoulder too blind to see
That the only one ever to suffer was me
Been denied my only request to be loved
I'd rather be cut, cursed, shaken, or shoved
Battered, broken, bruised, branded or bled
Strung up from a tree or shot in the head
Then go another day as "just a good friend"

Fantastic - I love the use of words - particularly the cold of a shoulder too blind to see. Good, touching stuff ;)

[James Takeo Panton]

Very well-written....

[Joseph - Michael]

That was quite an unusal writing you got there. Even with the title as the metaphor just like that. It really flow, yet there are a few bumpy road on the way, but no worries

On the other hand, it's all still good...

[Brenda Sue]

Very well written and thought out. Wonderfully penned. Great job.

[Flow]

Very beautiful poem.. i know to never call you a good friend that part was excellent! We use to call this "Stuck in the Friend Zone" it is a horrible place sometimes. You have a good talent in expressing feelings especially the wanting of love. Excellent write