The Cold Dark

This is a dark poem pointing out the flaws in man. Trying to be light in a dark world is the theme behind it.

It's creeping closer day by day. 
The more I try to shine 
Harder it is to keep shadows at bay. 
I've been told I'll be fine 
Years have past and I can't find a way. 

I'm trying to find my flame. 
The more things change 
the more they stay the same. 
We are a funny race pure and strange. 

Reviews

[kris reed]

Another great poem. To me it reads better if the fifth line ("years have past and I can't find a way.") is absent. I'm not sure if that's because the rhyming scheme works better from one stanza to the next or because the next line repeats the inability to find a "way" or "flame." Also, I might try adding a "the" before "harder" and see what you think. I would have to say that I feel the same way about human kind.

[DaughterofHonor]

Absolutely love this. Love the comparison an contrast. :)