Silent Suicide

this describes a hard time in my life i hope you understand what i'm trying to say.

Breathe slowly.

Your brain of a hard days work spills out.

Networks and channels of dreams flash your eyelids.

You settle with one and cooperate with it.

Breathe slowly.

Soon you’re gasping for air.

Crust lines your eyes.

A blur of painful light and yelling drowns you.

Breathe slowly.

A blade, not so sharp but yet a blade.

Tears fill your mothers eyes.

Tears fill her daughters eyes.

Scratches and tears left by this deplorable blade.

No longer could she handle this life.

Breathe slowly.

God is here.

He shall help this non " believer.

For god loves all.

This blade mocks me.

“Where is your god now?”

Breathe slowly.

I spit and cry at the blade.

My god is here.

He has spared the life of a mother,

The holder of her children.

Unknown of tomorrow,

Should I awake to untimely death?

And surrender myself to god?

Tears drown my pillow.

I rest my head and find a place.

I will let go of that night.

I shall forgive.

I shall never forget.

Reviews

[Ivy]

I agree with TheHappyClam, it's really powerful, the emotions are so strong. I like that you repeated "Breathe Slowly" That line really stuck out to me. Good job.

[Miss Anna]

This is really powerful, great job.

[Deck_As_Heck]

I chose bricks as my picture because it kind of symbolized my whole world as bricks tumbling down that night.
I also took that picture.
check out my page at http://www.facebook.com/sunrayephotography

[Amit Parmessur]

You write well.
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[JulieNorell]

Amazzzzzzzzing!!!