When it rained the last time!

 

When it rained the last time,

everything had liven up!

Drops of purity came from heaven

with a new lease of life for everyone.

 

A new journey, all embarked on;

with a vigour never seen before.

Unanchored were all the ships;

captain leading from the fore

 

Unaware of where the winds would take them;

life had never been so uncertain before,

But all were certain of one thing -

never to return to the same shore.

 

Just when all seemed set to change;

just when the world seemed free of pain;

there was a call deep from the woods,

"Not just yet!" it echoed around.

 

It was a little bird, which saw its first monsoon.

Rain was pleasing but 'not just yet' could it go!

It hadn't yet tasted the charm of flying;

hadn't yet experienced spread wings' glow.

 

'Life is not fair' onlookers exclaimed!

But fair was the smile on the little one's face.

'Not just yet is it time for me to go,

but i will wait till it rains the next time!'

Reviews

[Kitty Davies]

I find this piece a rather sea-chanty one. The rhyming sceme is really swinging to me, but the word "before" is used in two consecutive stanzas that I find off putting. Also, the rhyme is not consistant through all stanzas which would really allow the poem to mesh together a bit better. In all, I enjoyed the imagery you put into this and it has a lot of potential.