love chosen

8/11/15

My wildly beating heart has chanced,
upon your light and my joyous soul danced,
With yours in some other life as taken wing,
and flown with yours in the best of all dreams
I am sympathetic to your aim,
but with your charm
how could you be blamed
You've enslaved my heart,
it's yours to claim,
One day in a unexpected heaven,
by our destiny we've been selected

Reviews

[Ezekiel]

Wow i like that!! Very very heartfelt i felr that 8n my spirit

[alanwgraham]

very good - I think this has great potential. Is it by chance that you rhymed the first two lines - I think it raises the expectation the the rest will rhyme. Personally I think that rhyming can be a bit of a straightjacket and can spoil a poem if not done well.
Good work.
Alan