Woman

It was written a couple of years ago. A pretty girl who I was too shy to talk to is my inspiration here. Now I ponder...I haven't overcome this weird shyness of mine...yet!

I talk of silly dreams

And of reveries
Those out of my reach.

Woman,
I see you in stills,
On bill-boards and on TV screens,
Yet I never place my eyes on yours
Too shy for my burning cheeks.

I talk of gallantry
Then again wallow in a reverie.
In some spider men suits saving
Mary Jane Watsons.

I talk of beauty
That runs around in circles, thee
Woman, yours is most dazzling;
Yet I never place my eyes on yours
Too shy for my burning cheeks.

I behold you Woman, in Mona Lisas in art galleries
Even in Modigliani, Picasso’s women
They were beaming from their frames
But I was too shy to sing a hymn.

You Woman,
You baffle me with your beauty
You the Charming, you beguile me.

From Oedipus complex to jealousy
I writhed with pain, I writhed in shame,
Yet I never place my eyes on yours
Too shy for my burning cheeks.

Yet I’m charmed by your affection motherly
In Mother Theresa, Florence Nightingale I see thee
This earth would have been gray with misery
Had your pulchritude not touched his heart’s strings.

Woman,
Yet I never place my eyes on yours
Too shy for my burning cheeks.

Author's Note

Photo Credit: unknown artist, unknown work

Reviews

[Adam, the Grub Street L..]

This is an incredibly sweet piece capturing a person's inability to look beauty in the eye, and also their ability to see it everywhere. Of course, the answer is to take the mysticism and on-a-pedestal-ness away from the opposite sex and to look at those notions straight in the eye. But then we wouldn't get sweet poetry about awkwardness and appreciation and maybe the awkwardness is needed for the appreciation.

[Ripple of Aqua]

I can tell, just by how much you question if you should even talk to her, that you must have adored this girl as you silently watched her from afar. This was very sweet and I know that if the girl had read this, she would have been more than flattered.

[T.W. Early]

Beautiful poem. Shows someone's true fixation with a beautiful women. loved it.

[N. N. Grainger]

Sujash! I love this. The use of simply 'Woman' as the title, communicates very poignantly the comparisons you have made to influential women, not only does this show how inspirational this much be for you but also portrays 'Woman' to be a very classic lady. I find the 'Oedipus' stanza particularly beguiling, I think it shows how messed up strong feelings can make someone feel, how alienated....when really it is pure normality. Reading about Oedipus and Electra complexes really does make you feel ashamed and bewildered, if in fact you endorse Freud's theories, that is. And Jealousy, what a foul thing. I know this feeling so well, who ever thought we could all be jealous people when we discover love?

A great poem my friend, I'd publish it ;)

[DelicateSymphony]

Writing about a fear in my opinion is one of the most difficult things to write about, and I think you nailed it on the spot. Every line spoke to me. This is an excellent poem and I love it! Good job!

[Laughing-Bear]

My Dear Writing Friend Sujash,
This poem made me smile and I thought, I wonder how many of us are unnerved around women. I have been charged by grizzly bears, had moose try to stomp me, been in snow storms so white I could not see my dog team, and rode out earthquakes that shook so hard I could not stand. All the above were less unnerving than asking a woman if she would be willing to meet for a cup of coffee! In fact it took eight months for me to get up enough courage to ask the angel in my life for dinner.
This seems odd that a guy who loves heights and free climbs, is a caver loving tight places, has worked with law enforcement and have been in positions that made some wet their pants, and I was calm during and able to think clearly. How can I be so unnerved by a lady? Approaching a woman of interest sends a shiver down the spine, I break out in a cold sweat, and my pitter-patter goes heart, heart!
Your heart felt poem made total sense to me. You used five words that I have posted their definitions for, as I was either not positive of their exact meaning of wondered would others know there meaning.

reverie |ˈrevərē|
noun
1 a state of being pleasantly lost in one's thoughts; a daydream.
2 archaic a fanciful or impractical idea or theory.

gallantry |ˈgaləntrē|
noun ( pl. -ries)
1 polite attention or respect given by men to women.

beguile |biˈgīl|
verb [ trans. ]
1 charm or enchant (someone), sometimes in a deceptive way.

Oedipus complex
noun Psychoanalysis
(in Freudian theory) the complex of emotions aroused in a young child, typically around the age of four, by an unconscious sexual desire for the parent of the opposite sex and a wish to exclude the parent of the same sex. (The term was originally applied to boys, the equivalent in girls being called the Electra complex.)

pulchritude |ˈpəlkrəˌt(y)oōd|
noun poetic/literary
beauty.

I think it is easer to ask out ladies whom have become friends. Play it like a soccer game. Punt the ball, “The idea of doing something like a quite dinner together”, and see if the Lady runs the ball back to you. If she is interested she will want to play. Just don’t be surprised if you get tackled. I loved the poem; I loved the fact you wrote of facing a fear. A most excellent write.

Blessings, Laughing-Bear

[Francesca]

Wow I love all of your references and your word choice! You make your appreciation for the woman's beauty very clear (through your shyness and comparing her to other beautiful figures).
My favorite part was about Spider man/Mary Jane. Spider man's my favorite :)
Good job on this!

[Nancy]

I feel your shyness here. I too have been to shy to talk to someone. I think that if this were written about me I might just find myself throughly romanced. :)
That said keep up the great writing. I cant see any possible way to make any improvements.

[Nicole Dunlap]

This was very beautiful :)

[A.E. Surdam]

Very nice, I appreciate art. I love it. Especially whenever you would go to a large art museum and see all the pieces famous artists spent their life's work on. This is very beautiful and I love how you create this.

[Sarah Morgan]

This is a very charming piece.. a man intrigued by all these powerful and beautiful women. I love the spider-man/mary jane part :) Big fan of Spiderman as well as Superman.