Woman

It was written a couple of years ago. A pretty girl who I was too shy to talk to is my inspiration here. Now I ponder...I haven't overcome this weird shyness of mine...yet!

I talk of silly dreams

And of reveries
Those out of my reach.

Woman,
I see you in stills,
On bill-boards and on TV screens,
Yet I never place my eyes on yours
Too shy for my burning cheeks.

I talk of gallantry
Then again wallow in a reverie.
In some spider men suits saving
Mary Jane Watsons.

I talk of beauty
That runs around in circles, thee
Woman, yours is most dazzling;
Yet I never place my eyes on yours
Too shy for my burning cheeks.

I behold you Woman, in Mona Lisas in art galleries
Even in Modigliani, Picasso’s women
They were beaming from their frames
But I was too shy to sing a hymn.

You Woman,
You baffle me with your beauty
You the Charming, you beguile me.

From Oedipus complex to jealousy
I writhed with pain, I writhed in shame,
Yet I never place my eyes on yours
Too shy for my burning cheeks.

Yet I’m charmed by your affection motherly
In Mother Theresa, Florence Nightingale I see thee
This earth would have been gray with misery
Had your pulchritude not touched his heart’s strings.

Woman,
Yet I never place my eyes on yours
Too shy for my burning cheeks.

Author's Note

Photo Credit: unknown artist, unknown work

Reviews

[Adam, the Grub Street L..]

This is an incredibly sweet piece capturing a person's inability to look beauty in the eye, and also their ability to see it everywhere. Of course, the answer is to take the mysticism and on-a-pedestal-ness away from the opposite sex and to look at those notions straight in the eye. But then we wouldn't get sweet poetry about awkwardness and appreciation and maybe the awkwardness is needed for the appreciation.

[Mickey Hilts]

This is wonderful and confronts the enigma of 'woman' perfectly. Thanks a lot, I like it a great deal.

[MOON]

Beautiful write on the mystery of women and their power.

[Amelie]

I think this piece has layers (I'm talking about the premise/ on how you defined woman). At first, I thought it was a personal piece and upon reading, I soon realized that this piece is more than the sum of its parts. In here, "Woman" was acknowledged in history, psychology, mythology, and beyond then and now. I'm a feminist and this is a very delightful piece of affirmation to the quintessence of the existence of the daughters of Venus. :)

[caesarkreshen]

There is in-and-out goodness in here, I think. I feel like the first two lines are good and it sets a good rhythm for the piece. I also like the woman still-billboard-tvscreen part.

I feel at times this goes really off-the-wall, though. What about stanza 3? I don't understand it; it seems out of place. The reason why I prefer to write more nonsensical writing is I believe it allows me to go where I want to. When you start out with a very serious line, it seems like you almost have to continue with seriousness and a certain quality of words/themes. If that makes sense...

I know when people say they want honesty that sometimes they really don't, but I really think you could scrap everything after TV screens and try to make it more consistent and powerful. I mean, keeping the whole second stanza is fine, too. It just feels like what you began building wasn't really seen through to the end and I kind of would like to know what happens.

[siphon silence]

I really like this poem. The picture you included added to the poem magnifacently. It seems to me that the persona is a man who is too shy to speak and pursue this woman. I also like the repetitive lines, it really sets the tone for the poem. (Where you inspired by a villenlle?) I can relate to this poem.

[Allen Smuckler]

charming Sujash....if only women knew we were/are not aloof or narcissistic but rather shy and insecure. Think of how many "friendships" we've lost due to our embarrassment and fright. You have certainly depicted that feeling magnificently.
Well done, Sujash
allen
There's an old saying too...You don't take a chance....you aint got a chance...

[Tate Morgan]

I see music in your work very nice

[Emily]

I really liked this poem. The repetition made it, I think. I love your imagery as well. My favorite line was 'Woman,I see you in stills,On bill-boards and on TV screens, Yet I never place my eyes on yours Too shy for my burning cheeks.' Really good!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

yet I never place my eyes on yours..........I absolutely love this line. You are quite the poet. Bravo!

[Sahar moonlight]

That was awesome.
Your poems really makes me into them.
I dont feel i'm reading a poem.
I feel i've lived the poem.
Your style is really unique!