Better Off Dead

I am better off dead, you wouldn't miss me anyway

A lot of times I think I’d be better off dead.

I know it’s the truth cause I’m fucked in the head.

I know you’d be so much better then too,

You could do everything you’ve ever wanted to do.

 

Don’t worry about silly little me, I’ll be fine,

I whisper as cut another deep red line.

You don’t even want to know anyway,

You don’t need me though it’s sad to say.

 

You could just let me stay here and die,

It wouldn’t be your fault and you wouldn’t have to lie.

It’s all going according to the plan,

I’ll hang myself from the ceiling fan.

 

Maybe I’ll down all the sleeping pills,

Electricity is fun because it kills.

I’d do it as you went to bed,

In the morning you’d wake to find me dead.

 

It’s okay you don’t have to be sorry or sad,

Just for one day in all black you’d be clad.

It’s better this way, I need you to trust me,

I don’t want to hurt you anymore, can’t you see?

 

So as I shed just one last tear,

I write you this final goodbye, my dear.

I know that I won’t be missed,

Once by death I have been kissed.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Travis Green]

This was in fact a good poem. I was completely convinced of the pain that you/poet was going through. All of the words flowed together and gave a realistic image of life. The lines below were indeed great to me, especially the second line. Good work. And Fragile Dreamer is right. You should not be alone in the time of your pain. You have a world of friends out there who are willing to be there for you and help you through anything that you are going through. I don't know you personally, but you have a friend in me and I am definitely here when you need me. Truely indeed I am here.

Maybe I’ll down all the sleeping pills,

Electricity is fun because it kills.

I’d do it as you went to bed,

In the morning you’d wake to find me dead.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

Maybe I’ll down all the sleeping pills,
Electricity is fun because it kills.
I’d do it as you went to bed,
In the morning you’d wake to find me dead.

this made me smile and chill lol
simple and emotional
nice

[Amanda]

Thanks

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

"It’s okay you don’t have to be sorry or sad,
Just for one day in all black you’d be clad.
It’s better this way, I need you to trust me,
I don’t want to hurt you anymore, can’t you see?"

Beautiful, powerful write. I think we all have these feelings sometimes, unfortunately :/ the rhyme scheme was great in this, it really flowed well. The emotion is incredible, and I don't mean the longing to commit suicide.. Just how much emotion is there and how well you express it. However, I do hope that this was only a poem, that you aren't actually going to do this.. Anyways, beautiful write Amanda.

[Amanda]

Thanks :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

No problem.

[de_maruf]

fine

[David the writer]

Great poem. It's emotion was strong, and the rhyming gave the emotion flow. Again, well written.

If you died, idk about anyone else, but i'd miss you. I'm guessing alot of others would too. There's so much more time you have left to do great things, Amanda. Please use your time wisely while you still have it

[Amanda]

Thank ya bro :)

[David the writer]

Np, bro :)

[Moon]

I may not know you personally Manda , but I still want happiness for you . No one should have to suffer emotionally . I'm so sorry you are struggling with so much in life . Remember , there are people out there who do care about you and in your life you will discover more who will love you and care about you . Blessed be !

[Amanda]

Thanks :)

[Moon]

You are welcome

[KeeD]

I liked your ability to rhyme whiles still keeping the emotion. Was a well written poem on the concept of letting go, so the other person can move on. I'm not going to say I appreciate this genre of writing because I feel we as youth are better than that, when we feel this way we can divert these feelings to something else, anything else to be honest and it would have more positive effects, but then look at it this way you diverted it to writing and created a beautiful piece. Just, yeah I really appreciate your poetry and I'd miss you if you stopped uploading your writing here. :)

[Amanda]

Thanks dude :)

[Harley (arbiter)]

You will be missed! :( I know I would miss you.good poem though. Nice rhymes and stuff

[Amanda]

Thanks homeboy :P

[Ahmad Cox]

Hey amanda. You have too much light left in your soul. Even though life might seem rough now know that there will always be people that will love and miss you even if it can be hard to see some times. I think its safe to say that we all love you here and I can safely say I have a lot of love for you myself.

[Amanda]

Thank ya kindly :)

[C.C. Marx]

There will always, always be people out there who care for you and would miss you if you were gone. No matter how s****y of a day you have or how insecure you feel, there are always people who love you and think you beautiful and special. Never forget about those people. Great poem besides the darker subject

[Amanda]

Thanks :)