Night at the Opera

Music moaned with string quartet,

We were sitting in the balcony, 

Everything was civil, the opera; 

our hearts, like all things dangerous 

tend to be civil at the beginnings, 

echoing with whispers weak, 
soon the pace was set, as if by the warmth 

of her hand or by the color in her cheeks.

Bassoons and clarinets rose in the air, 
at that very moment had her hand, 
even by accident, slipped away from mine, 
I would have died like those---died in Shakespearean tragedy. 

Bold strokes of percussion were accompanied 
with cello, our hearts were palpitating 
with passion, she leaned, 
It was French cologne, and said, 

"Beethoven knows about our little secret."  

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

I really enjoyed the passion in this short piece. The imagery is superb as is the introduction of the musical instruments. You have stirred my senses, sight, sound, scent. Very nicely done.

Chris

[Suhd]

Thank you Chris. You're too kind.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Oh my goodness. I’m surely glad to come across such a consummate writer! This is such a passionate piece of poetry. An awed, envious meow. 100/100 for the sheer dramatic expression!

[Suhd]

I'm deeply humbled by your kind words :)
You're equally gifted and talented.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

I’m glad to meet you. You’re welcome.

[Suhd]

Glad to meet you, too!

[Verse]

Bassoons and clarinets rose in the air,
at that very moment had her hand,
even by accident, slipped away from mine,
I would have died like those---died in Shakespearean tragedy.

Just really well done. :):)

Don't you just hate it when classical authors seem to read our minds...?

I enjoyed the elevated tone flavoured with just the right amount of chemistry in this piece. We know what we're in for from the very first words of the opening line. Great setting of the stage, and a lovely piece! :):)

[Suhd]

Thank you so much Verse. You are too kind :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Wonderful used of words. The poem made the reader believe every word. Beautiful place described and I liked the ending. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Suhd]

Thanks a lot, John. Appreciate the review.

[emmajoy]

A gentle flow of words set in a vibrant location: the sound of music,feelings of passion. The final four lines create quite a heady atmospere, ' .. our hearts were palpitating ~ with passion, she leaned, ~ It was French cologne, and said, ~ "Beethoven knows about our little secret." '

[Suhd]

Thank you so much Emma for leaving such a nice review :)

[emmajoy]

You're very welcome.. rather think English isn't your first language but your writing flows so smoothly.. and inventively.

[Suhd]

Thanks once again. I'm a graduate in English literature so...

[emmajoy]

oops! sorry..

[Suhd]

Nah, it's fine. You were right though.

[emmajoy]

How diplomatic, thank you for that.

[danny]

very nice this work is like a painting to me

[Suhd]

Thanks for the compliment danny.

[Richard McLin]

I think the structure needs a bit of work, but ultimately I love this piece, especially the very last line "Beethoven knows about our little secret." That is a FANTASTIC line. Great job, was a lot of fun to read, and I think it's a very interesting piece.
-Richard

[Suhd]

Thanks very much for constructive criticism and appreciation :)

[Richard McLin]

OF course, look forward to reading more of your work.

[CLR9]

booooooooooooooooooorrrinnng

[Suhd]

I didn't write it for you. Keep your s**t to yourself.

[Hannah]

The opera! What could be a more romantic backdrop? The shifts and turns in the music are a great way to express those tender emotions. Very creative and romantic.

[Suhd]

Thanks a lot for the kind words :)

[Ted Kniffen]

Beethoven...one of my favourites. The description of the music ties in very well with the setting. There are a few grammatical things to look at...Music moaned with string quartet, (music moaned like a string quartet) & at that very moment had her hand, even by accident, had slipped away from mine... (at that very moment had her hand, even by accident slipped away from mine)...these are minor things, the poem is a fine expressive ode to Valentine's Day.

[Suhd]

Thanks a lot Ted for your words of appreciation and criticism!