How Was I to Know?

Poem expressing feelings about someone special to me. :)

- How Was I to Know? -

All those years ago,

When I first laid eyes on thee,

How was I to know,

The beauty I would see.

I would never do anything to disguise,

From those, so blue, striking eyes.

The fiery silk from atop your head,

A metaphor for my feelings, finally to be said.

As time goes by,

The more I see of you, in my mind's eye.

My longing for you a rose,

Seeded long ago, it still grows.

What am I to do,

With only thoughts of you?

However hard I try,

Nought is imagined, but you and I.

All those years ago,

When I first laid eyes on thee,

How was I to know,

How much you'd mean to me?

- Jamie Chandler -

Author's Note

Wrote this for someone and thought I'd upload it to get some feedback before I made use of it. :)

Reviews

[Impulse]

2nd stanza - "disquise" should be "disguise"
3rd stanza - "minds" should be "mind's"
4th stanza - "imaginned" should be "imagined"

Overall, excellent job describing your feelings of love. Whoever it's for will definitely love it. The piece had a nice flow to it as well. Keep up the good work =]

[Otingocni]

Love it!

[Cassie Shay]

It's great. Sometimes when I see a poem with an actual rhyme scheme, I get kind of tired of it halfway through because the rhymes are forced and throw off the rhythm. But this was nothing like that. This was beautiful, it flows really well, it's just overall a great piece. :)

[Crifa]

Very nice poem. I have written many poems about someone special to me but they never come out just right. Unlike me you should be not only satisfied but happy about this. Good writing keep it up!

[KWatts]

Love it reminds me of my boyfriend and I. We first met in grade school at the age of five and now we are talking about marriage and the future

[Wild Willow Blue]

I really love this. Very well written. Made me think of someone from my past.

[Brittany_Rena]

I'd have to say this is a beautiful poem and has such powerful meaning behind it.

[Seshat Nidaba]

This is very "I feel therefore I see" - Jamie of you. I enjoyed it whole-heartedly.

[1ceburnt2ceshy]

it sounds really heart-felt, and i love the phrases: "My longing for you a rose,
Seeded long ago, it still grows." and "What am I to do,
With only thoughts of you?" and "However hard I try,
Nought is imagined, but you and I." and the last stanza is really sweet.

[Robert Malcom]

masterfully put together, I love the technique of re-writing the first lines at the end only in slightly different words

[Macrory]

Nothing touches the heart quite so much as longing for love. Very Nice.