A Start Awaiting

A Start Awaiting . © Accentuation 2010

by Subham Chatterjee .

                     ***  A Start Awaiting ***

 To a new city, do my words flow free --

Non-chalant, infectious - thoroughly seeping through me ,

A slow sea, one water , other of us -- crowded trains,

Night-Neons-Noise, my heart goes out to its beating rains!

 

Mumbai it is then, as I start my day,

Me, just a soul , among its mighty sway

Of lives, a harbinger of oblivion and reminisce,

Mumbai, a place, catering to fair and unfair - a piece.

 

As, from my new felt home , do I start today,

To a place , where amusingly I get my pay,

A statuesque city does catch my eye,

Like a grand old soul , caught amidst the rye .

 

Through the tinted glass of an over-used bus,

Could I see the mingled, random eight'o clock rush,

No glimpse of a second look-- of those busy faces - can u catch ,

As the city turns  its back to all those closed doors' latch.

 

As an when it starts to rain,

It blows off any empty essence of Mumbai's terrain.

With every puddle of splash the tyres create

Disturbing the droplets, from some overflown trail articulate.

 

As we slow down, with vapours crowding the screen,

A carefree school-boy , his paper boats , a sailer within,

With each rise in the water, waits to smile

The drenched quest soul, looks afar his boats, from a mile.

 

By and by, with passing time and with road's every new turn,

From my bus, I see a small teashop's steam run,

Cooler, smoother, as it may get --

Warmer with a morning that starts off wet ..

 

I wouldnt try to write more though,

Let me end- a more 'next time' is in waiting in a row,

A pool of incidents, still does run through my vein,

All thanks to a beautiful girl's borrowed pen .

 

 

-- Subham Chatterjee.

Reviews

[Daytonight]

Great rhyme and flow. Keep up the good work!

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Really lovely writing!
Keep it up!
Do you read mine too ANGUISH!
God bless you...
Lucky!Really lovely writing!
Keep it up!
Do you read mine too ANGUISH!
God bless you...
Lucky!

[Jazique]

Nice word creative, interesting and love the ending when all thanks to a beautiful girl's borrowed pen. Nicely done.

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Good..!!!

[Pradnya]

good one

[Xicor]

Catchy and Vivid :)

[Alice]

on a white canvas a beautiful picture emerges...excellent

[Dahlia Phoenix]

"As, from my new felt home , do I start today,

To a place , where amusingly I get my pay,

A statuesque city does catch my eye,

Like a grand old soul , caught amidst the rye ."

Your poem is well detailed making an imagery that plays in the reader's mind. The passion behind each word is felt and the way how you're introducing the new environment is showing the life that simply goes on.

[Thea]

You're poems are great when it comes to rhyme schemes...Pretty good... :)

[Becky C Strukamp]

Wonderful imagery.