A Failed Poem

A failed poem . ©Kaleidoscope

by Subham Chatterjee 

                            **         A failed Poem       **

 

Just through random words placed through,

Adorned with a glimpse of ornamental essence in you,

Words of cunning wisdom, you do write....

Impressive, picturesque - to more than one might.

 

But are you sure, your heart reaches us ?

Or is it just a few lines making a fuss,

Tinge of an essence as it may seem,

Golden words of your poem , shy realm.

 

So you think you can write a notion ?

An honest change in us, sans corrosion,

Limited , pushed to abyss, down with palistenense

Emotions, eroded, sans valid existence.

 

I wish I could write my thoughts like you,,

But my words repeat, as my words are so few,

Time and again as I crumble past,

I look upon my failed poem , I wrote last.

 

If I can't write, can't I say?

Whereon my true self solemnly lay,

No matter as to how my these poems fail,

They will keep a slow, recreated trail .

 

With every word of lesser essence that suffice,

With every word of life with which it ends,

There will you start a poem, my friends,

It's there where this art truly mends .

 

Reviews

[Daytonight]

Thank you for sharing with me. Keep on penning.

[Jazique]

Nicely done for I see this as an successful poem. It had a certain flow of words and truth in it for some of us at times when it comes to words but, I do love the ending here "It's there where this art truly mends." Well done with this.

[Ruth]

Your use of language in this is inviting and warming! Another sublime poem...I am literally blown away! lol AWESOME! xx

[Dahlia Phoenix]

"So you think you can write a notion ?
An honest change in us, sans corrosion,.."

From the other poem I just read, I love the rhyme scheme you placed into this very poem because it speaks of the expressions we release through various words. This is a compelling poem. Nice job.

[Thea]

Very great flow here...Nice... :)))

[Becky C Strukamp]

Beautifully penned.

[Carrion.]

I adore this, you have an amazing talent. It's well put together, I love it.

[Lily Mae]

I love this because it gives me a great sense of where you end someone else begins. The full circle of life...xx

[Tasha]

I know what you mean, I liked this a lot. Great job.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[?]

Exactly!!!!!!!!!!!! Well this is very well written.
Enjoyed the read